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  • Script » Literature, Humor
    Re: The Realest Phony of Them All.

    Hey, Erin here to review. Wow this one was seriously amazing. Well first thing, you took the two of my favorite literary characters and you didn't just use them. but ...

    May 19, 2014

  • Other » Culture, Realistic
    Re: It's all So... Depressing

    Hi, Erin here to review. I dont have much to say about your writing style, or anything like that, because I liked it. No critique there. I likes the idea ...

    Mar 13, 2014

  • Poetry » Culture, General
    Re: She wears six inch heels.

    Hi, Erin here to review. I sort of have a thing against the line "Maybe people should stop poisoning themselves". Apart from my personal opinion about it, as a reader, ...

    Mar 13, 2014

  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: Unhinged Reality

    Hi. First of all, I super like your piece. There isnt much to review or say about it, because it is so good. It is short, and it's beauty lies ...

    Dec 30, 2013

  • Poetry » General, Other
    Re: A Stream Of Consciousness

    Hi. I really liked your piece, and when I say that, I mean I really really liked it. So, i'll begin by saying that the structure you chose was a ...

    Dec 30, 2013

  • Poetry » Health, Dramatic
    Re: Anastasia Loves You

    Hi KittyBee, Well for starters, I really liked your piece. The idea behind it, is wonderful. The way you've executed the idea is powerful. Short sentences really help with sinking ...

    Dec 27, 2013

  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic
    Re: I Don't Wanna Hurt You Anymore

    Hi, Erin here to review here for you. I liked your piece in general. I'll begin with a few nitpicks: "I would be lost from sight"... as a sentence didn't ...

    Dec 21, 2013

  • Lyrics » Romantic, General
    Re: Free and Unafraid

    Hi. I loved this. I like the structure the most, for starters. Then I like the two main lines you've repeated so much: "I – want to be free and ...

    Dec 20, 2013

  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic
    Re: The Cold Truth

    Hi. For starters: "Maybe, just maybe, One day I'll reach him. And then he'll smile at me, And maybe we'll even talk. I'd like that." gave me goosebumps. I really ...

    Dec 20, 2013

  • Poetry » Realistic, Review
    Re: Musicians

    Hi. Erin here to review. I like the idea behind the piece, but honestly, the piece didn't work for me that much. Not that I didn't like it. I liked ...

    Dec 20, 2013

  • Short Story » Realistic, Literature
    Re: I Survive

    Hi, So I extremely love this piece. The first thing I am doing after writing this review is sending a link to my "Ashley" (please tell me you know what ...

    Dec 19, 2013

  • Other » Realistic, General
    Re: A Collection of Reflections

    Hi. I think your piece was wonderful. It was a very risky piece to write, because there is nothing happening, or really taking place in the piece, no action at ...

    Dec 19, 2013

  • Hi. So, I like the expression behind the piece a lot. I come from the same place of being alone and feeling lonely, more often then I like to talk ...

    Dec 19, 2013

  • Poetry » General, Narrative
    Re: Beautiful Disaster

    Hi. So, I'll firrst go with the parts I really like: "a long-forgotten chaos that surrounds you." "she’s the train wreck that you just can’t stop staring at " "a ...

    Dec 19, 2013

  • Lyrics » Romantic, Spiritual
    Re: You Take My Breath Away

    Hi. I liked the piece. I won't say, honestly, that it "took my breath away", but it felt really good. So, the best lines first: "Honey, don’t you care about ...

    Dec 17, 2013

Morning without you is a dwindled dawn.
— Emily Dickenson