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  • Article / Essay » Review, General
    Re: Of Mice and Men

    Having gone over and over this book many multiple times in preparation for our English Lit. exam last year, I'm thoroughly sick of it, and its many references to the ...

    Oct 17, 2008

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    Re: Best Fantasy Series Ever

    I'll have to read that sometime. Your description of him and his writing style makes me think of Dickens. Very innovtive to the point where the general public can't take ...

    Oct 13, 2008

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Fear - Title Pending

    I really liked this. Short, sweet, effective. I love your use of imagery, and I think it's ideal as a prologue. No amount of tears can shift this image, though ...

    Jun 25, 2008

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General
    Re: The Quest, Prologue and Chapter One

    Hi! As I'm attempting a bit of a critiquing spree, I decided to answer your plea for a critique. Thus, on with the ripping apart! I quite liked this, as ...

    Mar 9, 2008

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: Embracing the Moon

    Just a quick tip - when posting in the literary forums, try not to post a huge chunk of your story in one go. This puts people off hugely. Also, ...

    Mar 8, 2008

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: Betrayed and Plagued

    Hello. My name's Kyle, and I'll be your reviewer for today :wink: This was interesting. I think it has potential, but there's a lot to improve on, such as your ...

    Mar 8, 2008

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: A Fool's Hope

    Well, here I go again. I'm glad you put this up - has been a long wait! Chapter Three I enjoyed this - some good dialogue, character development, description, all ...

    Mar 8, 2008

  • Article / Essay » Review, General
    Re: I Just Read ERAGON and ELDEST!

    OK, I've just started reading Eldest (it's some free thing on the internet - no way would I pay to read this drivel) and in the very first paragraph I ...

    Feb 8, 2008

  • Article / Essay » Review, General
    Re: Amber Spyglass

    Although I disagree that these are considered children's books. You don't call Jurassic Park a children's book just because it has dinosaurs in it, and you don't call His Dark ...

    Jan 13, 2008

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: A Fool's Hope

    Hello Twitters. Well, I promised I'd read Scarab, which I did, though only half of it. Time constraints (and a shameful habit of losing things) are a curse. Anywho, I ...

    Dec 11, 2007

  • Hello again! I see that this is a much shorter post than your previous one, and so therefore easier for me to critique. So that's good! A word of advice, ...

    Nov 21, 2007

  • Hi! I see you haven't been here long, so welcome to YWS! I did read the whole thing (let's face it, what good would I be if I didn't?), and ...

    Nov 20, 2007

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: The Broken -- Chapter One

    Hi! Firstly, I like this. It's very well laid out, the spelling and punctuation is spot-on (bar a few missing or changeable words- nothing big) and the story itself is ...

    Nov 15, 2007

  • Article / Essay » Review, General
    Re: Harry Potter & Inheritance- Opinions Wanted!!

    Wow, you really love Harry Potter and the Inheritance series don't you? well i got some good news and some bad news for you christopher paolini is not going to ...

    Nov 10, 2007

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Al Gore's Nobel Prize

    I thought this was very well written, and subtly funny, although I think the satire could have been explored more. But, yeah, very well written. I also agree with you ...

    Oct 19, 2007

The thing about plummeting downhill at fifty miles an hour on a snack platter - if you realize it's a bad idea when you're halfway down, it's too late.
— Rick Riordan, The Son of Neptune