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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Breaking

    Hello-- I really like this poem, because it's so succinct and reflects something that is a problem/concern for many people. A lot of people who do have something wrong going ...

    Mon Feb 08, 2010 9:32 pm

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Our Own Private Betrayal

    This is such an awesome little poem, Connie. I like short poems because they're quick to memorize and then you can remember them easily at times when you might need ...

    Mon Feb 08, 2010 5:59 am

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: snow falling on cedars

    Hey you - oh my god, I know, I'm reviewing, isn't this nuts?! chimes of ice hang from the saplings like bells attached to gypsy ankles, cold, and clear-voiced as ...

    Mon Feb 08, 2010 5:45 am

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: This Body has No Soul

    Hey Write! --- Since the day you left, everything I tried to forget, An order of the mind, An unaccomplished task by the broken heart This part seems incomplete. You ...

    Wed Sep 16, 2009 10:26 pm

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: I Stand Up

    Ayumi-- I enjoy this poem, mainly because I think the final line is so simple and sweet. I have only one qualm I would like to point out though: I ...

    Thu Sep 03, 2009 11:24 pm

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General
    Re: Armageddon

    Hey lkay06! I will be your reviewer today. :) --- [BEFORE THIS SEGMENT: I'm a little confused as to what you mean by "this segment". Can you perhaps clarify? It's ...

    Tue Sep 01, 2009 6:55 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Angler Part I

    Hey Ryanx! You may be wondering, "Why has no one reviewed this?!" The answer is simple: on this site, we have a rule that you must review at least two ...

    Tue Sep 01, 2009 6:43 pm

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General
    Re: The Manio Family

    Hey Leoni! This is quite long, but I feel ready to tackle it. ;) --- NITPICKS The black fug of a night in Soorey Island Typo here. his fingers tracing ...

    Tue Sep 01, 2009 6:34 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: An Iron Sea pt. 2

    Sir Conrad! The unfortunate hypothermia gal, her name is Denise Patterson? And Claireborne's assistant's name is Hallie Natterson? Haha. Sorry, I'm focusing a bit too much on names, but did ...

    Sat Aug 01, 2009 6:38 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: An Iron Sea pt. 1

    My good sir! I am quite late with this, but me and internet haven't really been all that adhesive to each other lately, and you know this. Since you've already ...

    Sat Aug 01, 2009 5:49 pm

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Free

    Ms. Antigone Cadmus Haruno Sakura... I am here to review. :) --- Her footsteps pit pat throughout the walls, bouncing off the stalactites and into her pounding eardrum. "Throughout" seems ...

    Thu Jun 18, 2009 3:39 am

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: All Mine

    Hola GreatEscape! --- I did not have to look at my husband beside me to know that he was staring also. Also looks odd at the end of the sentence ...

    Wed Jun 17, 2009 4:38 am

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Hailey's story

    Peanutpeanutpeanut, lucky you were in chat so I could spot this need of a story review! ^_^ --- I stood still as a statue. My nose pressed against the cold, ...

    Fri Jun 12, 2009 11:03 pm

  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General
    Re: Preserved

    Hey Elijah! How do you do? --- What's going on in this story seems very interesting. The style it is written in, however, is extremely choppy and this is extremely ...

    Thu Jun 11, 2009 4:41 am

  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General
    Re: Ramree

    Conrad, the devilish speed writer. Well, hey, at least you have one killer beefy profile of short stories. --- Hell is noise. It is a cacaphony of vicious sounds, the ...

    Wed Jun 10, 2009 4:37 am


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