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BetsyJ

  • Poetry » Romantic, General
    Re: The spring of my senses

    Hi, I read this poem because the title caught my attention. It is an attractive title. The poem is an innocent portrayal of love, or maybe the early stages of ...

    Fri Sep 10, 2021 1:21 pm

  • Short Story » Realistic, General
    Re: The Waiting Room

    Hi, This short story does present an interesting idea. You have introduced your main character, and presented their thoughts and perceptions (which is all great), but it is, however, cliched ...

    Thu Sep 09, 2021 4:38 pm

  • Short Story » Realistic, Narrative
    Re: 3:39 am

    Hi, First of all, I am new around here too, so I hope you have a great time reading and writing in here! :))) Coming to your narrative, it is ...

    Tue Sep 07, 2021 6:02 pm

  • Short Story » Horror, Humor
    Re: What Would You Do?

    Hi, This is an exciting snippet of a story. After reading it, I felt like it was a nightmare that the main character could possibly be having with a game ...

    Tue Sep 07, 2021 12:49 pm

  • Poetry » Romantic, Horror
    Re: 10 years of hiding bruises

    Hi, Great job with the structure. It makes the reader really curious and want to read it right away. For me, the two most vivid images in this poem are ...

    Tue Sep 07, 2021 12:18 pm

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: Monster

    Hi, I like the structure of the poem. It keeps the reader interested and excited. I like that this poem has brevity and a twist at the end. It deals ...

    Tue Sep 07, 2021 11:03 am

  • Art » Fantasy, General
    Re: Whimsical Wisps

    Hi, here is a quick review: I noticed that nature and its vastness are a couple of overarching themes here...you have tried to describe the sky as an 'ocean', and ...

    Tue Sep 07, 2021 10:44 am

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Fantasy
    Re: the texture of flower petals

    Dear manilla, Your language is admirable and very evocative. My curiosity was piqued by this piece, and I find myself wanting to know how the rest of the story goes. ...

    Mon Sep 06, 2021 11:41 am


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