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  • Mageheart
    Mar 24, 2017

    Happy birthday!~ I hope you have a wonderful day that's filled with joy - you definitely deserve it! ☆


  • Butterfly18
    Mar 14, 2013

    Hey, Metalmauzen.

    I just posted Ch 1 of my Sci-fi novel. Working title is Elara.

    work.php?id=100314

    You might be interested.

    :)


  • Metalmauzen
    Jan 10, 2013

    Man, I really have to start visiting this site more often


  • Butterfly18
    Jun 22, 2012

    Hey how have you been? Good I hope. :)

    I've submitted a short story. You might be interested. Would love a review.

    work.php?id=96044

    :)


  • Butterfly18
    Jun 22, 2012

    Hey how have you been? Good I hope. :)

    I've submitted a short story. You might be interested. Would love a review.

    work.php?id=96044

    :)


  • Metalmauzen
    Apr 22, 2012

    MUhahahahaha


  • Metalmauzen
    Mar 24, 2012

    It's my 21st birthday! WOOOO


    zohali93 happy birthday
    Mar 24, 2012


    murtuza Happy Birthday!
    Mar 24, 2012

  • Your avatar. I can't seem to take my eyes off of it.


    Metalmauzen it is THAT good hahha
    Mar 24, 2012


  • Metalmauzen
    Mar 23, 2012

    I've just seen The Human Centipede...now kids, there is something you really and I mean REALLY don't want to see....My eyeballs are swollen and my eyebrows are on the top of my forehead....I'm pretty much into horror, but dahumn!


  • Metalmauzen
    Mar 22, 2012

    it must be nice to be a heavy metal hamster!

  • Hahaha! I love your avatar!


    Metalmauzen Thanks =D
    Mar 21, 2012


  • WaitingForLife
    Mar 18, 2012

    Heyou! Didn't get no notification, guess it's got something to do with the new site and all :D But thanks for the review! Your interpretation was closer; you just missed the fact that he had killed his daughter. And it's definitely my story telling skills to blame in this one :D I tried to go for a frantic web of thoughts as the structure, but I guess it got a little too frantic. Think I'll have to go and make a few things clearer by the looks of it! So yeah thanks, and oh, no, I never did enter the contest. Completely forgot about it :P


  • xXTheBlackSheepXx
    Mar 17, 2012

    Your avatar is insane x)


    Metalmauzen thanks, I seem to get that a lot :P
    Mar 17, 2012


  • manisha
    Mar 17, 2012

    thanks for the offer, I havent posted anything lately.


  • Butterfly18
    Mar 16, 2012

    Thanks so much for the review of, Bullets. I appreciate it heaps.

    I do like the flow of Red's line that u suggested a bit better than my line. Thanks for that.

    As for 'We're spotted', I did see that was an opportunity like you said, but i couldn't think of anything that didn't sound massively cliched. Haha.

    I'm really glad you enjoyed it.

    And as for creating suspense, I think maybe you should write it step by step, the scenes you want suspense in. Just short clips like:
    Knives glint in moonlight.
    Face appears from shadows.
    Starts running.

    If you write it kind of like this, then you focus on the most prominent actions and I think that makes a scene more suspenseful, even if not a lot is happening.

    Overall suspense I think is a bit harder and involves foreshadowing which I'm still trying to get the hang of.

    Anyway, thanks for the review. I'm grateful for your feedback. :)



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