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My name is Omniyus, and I will be here to review to get you out of the green room! All kidding aside, I am here to review for you!
This poem is extremely funny! I liked how you created what you were doing(dreaming in this case) and, in this case, what you were dreaming about.
So, I was looking at your stanzas. I didn't know if you wanted to keep it the same rhyming pattern. The first and second stanza were ABAB, the third wasn't rhyming at all, the fourth was ABAB, but the last wasn't rhyming either. That's just nit-picky stuff that really is just something you don't need to listen to.
I loved this and, even though I don't like a lot of poetry, I will go back and read this over and over.
Hope this helps at all,
Omniyus
Points: 3775
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