Muahahaha!
The letter had arrived on his door step that morning
doorstep*
When he threw it in fire, the flames consumed all there was so that Frank had no hope of pulling it back out again and reading it.
Seems like a bit of a run-on, if you ask me. I'd get rid of "and reading it," since what else do you do with a letter? Go fishing? Take it to an amusement park? xD
The second one is creepy. O_O
Frank kept his tears in a jar with a lid so tight no human could open it.
Personally, I don't think the presence of "human" here is entirely necessary -- as opposed to a gorilla? Or a machine? Meh. Personal preference, don't mind me. ^^
*reads on* Oh wait, never mind.
Brilliant metaphor in that last one, love. ^^
Now I want to know how these tie into the story. O_O
Brilliant, darling. You'll do wonderful in the contest, methinks. Best of luck!
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xD
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