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And my thoughts go to the wind

by lostnspiration


[pre]There is no partitioning darkness in the artificial twilight of the city night
Though I can see the stars of the metropolis shining from the balcony of my building
The balcony we never use
Natural pinpricks of light are dim in the sky, and few
There is nowhere to be alone
Not that loneliness is my bed mate
But solitude can soothe the soul
And my soul needs soothing

I had a strange dream when I was a child
That the wind was a man
That I was his betrothed
As the night brushes my hair from my face
I don't find that thought all too strange
The wind caresses me with the intimacy of a lover
And I lean against the rails of my prison
Surrendering to Aeolus's cool embrace
But I open my eyes
To see a dead sky
An orange glow low on the horizon
And I find that I am not alone
And I realize that I am truly alone

A sigh

And my thoughts go to the wind[/pre]


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Wed Jan 23, 2008 8:51 pm
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Wow - that was so beautiful. I like how you said how the wind was a man and he was so gentle... aww...
You are such a talented poet. I pray that you keep writing :)




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Wed Jan 23, 2008 3:11 am
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wow, i've really started to like poetry, and there's lots of good stuff on the site. (and a bit of bad stuff). this is definitely among the good. it was odd, but somehow it seemed to flow very well. the first paragraph was confusing, but the second was very good...

the ending. awesome.

keep writing!!!!!!

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Thu Jan 17, 2008 1:56 pm
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Wow, I really liked this. I dabble in poetry at the most, so I can't critique, but I figure praise is good too.

This was just so vivid. I could imagine everything in the poem as it was described. And the language was so pretty. It just flowed and dipped.

I really did like this. Congrats. This is something to be proud of.

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