Young Writers Society

My heart was meant for you

Be sure to read over your posts a few times first so you can catch typos

I think this would actually work better as song lyrics rather than poetry. It's still pretty "navel gazing" though. What I mean by that is, it focuses very hard on I, the narrator. Poetry needs to do something for the reader. People read poetry to feel something, to be made to think or change their opinions. Not to be blunt, but, they would read your blog if they wanted to hear about you. Poetry is a good form of personal expression, but the best poetry ever written usually isn't personal poetry, which is why you sometimes have to forget about yourself if you want to write poetry. You have to keep the reader in mind.

I hope that rant didn't bore you to death. ^_^

Consider ways to add imagery. On your other poem, I commented on imagery and metaphors and all that, I also gave you a link to a poem that I think you should read, so since I commented on that, I'll just say, take the advice and run with it. Put it to use on everything, this included.

Best of luck! If you have any questions, feel free to PM me.