I'm always so impressed by people, who do blackout (or whiteout in this case) poems, and this is definitely one of the best I've seen. I LOVE the use of the pens on top, crossing and scribbling stuff out and then circling and underlining other bits. I especially love the extra little comments in red, they feel really effective as a more coherent form of thought in contrast with the (in my view) somewhat deteriorating mind of the letter writer in denial. There are some parts where it feels quite difficult to decipher what is being said, but I think this actually works as a benefit and in most cases the message behind the words is very clear.
I am very intrigued by the use of the colours - clearly the red writing is the reader's thoughts, so are the crossings out and things in black from the writers view/in the process of writing? I also wonder if there is any kind of key/pattern behind the different types of crossing things out. This poem raises a lot of questions for me, but is incredibly impressive and emotional. Congrats on such a beautiful poem.
Thank you for sharing your work <3
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