Young Writers Society

Hello, i saw your review request, i'm still new to this, but lets give it a shot!
As someone who does piano recitals, i do think that this is very accurate, it is a very positive look on the experience as well, and i can tell that it is written by someone who cares about preforming. It feels almost like a song, although there is no chorus, i think that the way that it doesn't feel like its focusing on a single character contributes to that, all and all, i love this.

Hello, TwilightMuse! VegasLights here to give you a review!

I really do like your poem, I think it has a nice flow and good choice of words! It shows us what it is like to really do a performance and accurately states the feelings. It gave me a nice feeling as I kept reading along, there was a couple of things that I would change. So, let's get started with the actual review.

There were a few awkward lines that I would reword. Line three in stanza five, I would leave out "pounding in our throats" because it makes the flow a little rocky. That is pretty much what I am talking about because some of your lines, well most are perfect and it is just a few that needs to be edited a bit.

Overall, I thought your poem was wonderful and the flow was great it was just those few things that threw me off. There was great feeling and emotions throughout the poem which I really loved. Your poem was really good and I hope you keep writing. Sadly, all reviews must come to an end and here is the end of this one! I thank you for your time and I hope you have a great day!

xo. VegasLights
(Previously Steam1244)

Hello there! Gonna leave you a review quickly.

Overall, your poem is quite nice. It easily reflects what it's like to do a performance in front of a crowd. Besides a few awkwardly worded lines, I felt like you wrote this with very nice flow. My only suggestion would be to try and add more sensory/descriptive details in such poetry. But other than that, you did a wonderful job! Keep writing, and I hope to read more of your work!

Hello TwilightMuse!
It's MergSword here with a review for you!

First I would like to begin with how I feel after I read this poem. I like the feeling the poem gives off. I think we've all had that feeling of fear and anxiety before. It could be the smallest things like answering a question, or as big as a Broadway performance.

I think you can add a few commas into the poem, I don't know why but when doesn't add commas I feel uncomfortable.

I'm a fan of the second to last stanza. It just captivated my interest, even if it was way at the end. Although when it came to captivating my interest, the first stanza didn't, which is th emits important part.

I do like however, as I mentioned before, the feeling. Keep on writing!


~MergSword