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First Impression: Hmm...well this was quite an interesting little story...quite a lot of spooky things happening there...and a pretty scary lady you have there in this one too...well...more details on all of that down below.
Anyway let's get right to it,
It is said true devastation occurs when the stars fall out of the sky.
Dymphna had prayed for this, as she waited, watching the inky night form.
Uh oh...true devastation sounds like it could be a pretty bad thing here...are we starting of on a potentially apocalyptic note here.... well the inky night forming at any rate seems like something that would signal some form of destruction or despair or at least that's what it seems to mean on most occasions, let's see I suppose. At any rate, this is a pretty cool and very attention grabby opening that you got here.
“It is this night!” she bellowed. The crowd of people stood behind her, her followers, seemed to solidly support her, as they chanted and cheered at her words.
Oooh...okay...this is getting really interesting, talks of a dark event, a pretty appropriately evil looking description of the nighttime and also followers for whoever is announcing this, this is sounding a bit like a classic situation of some sort of cult maybe, I don't really know quite what you intend here, but let' see where this goes. My idea might be totally wrong after all.
She spun to face them. Barely visibly in the dark were the crowds, except for the light from their torches, but Dymphna was something of a fearsome figure; and she alone stood clear among them. Her moss green hair hung down over her calloused caramel skin. Soulless aquamarine eyes like the harsh seas.
OKay...well that certainly seems like she is a pretty scary lady, pretty neat description for here there at any rate...definitely seems like someone that would make a fearsome leader at any rate. Well let's see where this is headed.
“My children, my subjects, you know how long I have been waiting for this night. Five hundred years, my time has been bid and is attached to the tides of the moon and the skies.”
Well that's a very interesting speech there that she starts off with...oh wow...five hundred years is definitely a lot of time to wait for something and talking about the moon and the skies like that also adds quite a bit of mystery to who she might be and what kind of thing that whole starting paragraph might be related to. Well, let's see I suppose.
The charisma with which she spoke had the crowd falling into the heavens of her words. “It is imperative that we must comprehend that we are changing our whole life’s course tonight and if that fact makes you uncomfortable; then feel free to abandon your destiny.”
Oooh well she is certainly speaking like the kind of leader that has followers and not friends...the words she's using here at least seem to make it so...and well the kind of grand changing the course of life thing makes it sound like some serious things are about to go down here.
She clapped her hands high above her head, like a puppeteer pulling the strings on all of their united puppets, the remaining stars in the sky did fall and silence blanketed the crowds forever.
Well that leaves things open for interpretation somewhat but from what I can understand it looks like all those people were in fact exposed to something like the end of the world there or at least it doesn't look like they are alive any longer...seems like some cosmic event did happen, and was potentially caused by this lady...oh well...a bit of a scary ending on that one.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall...this was a really interesting story...its definitely talking about some pretty mysterious things and that ending was...well...very unexpected and seemed quite bad for all those poor people. Well, at any rate, that's all I've gotta say here.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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