I like the question marks. For me, when I read it quickened the pace of the piece. It did make the person who seemed to ask the question sound nervous, kind of spinless maybe( but that isnt the word im looking for). If this was intended i think it gave the person more depth, making me feel as if I as part of the emotional journey the person made to the final decision of leaving. I think the last two lines especially make you feel this way. i dont think the rhyme was nescessary, it think it draws attention from the poem and the emotions found in it.
Points: 240
Reviews: 21
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