The kitty walks down the hallway,
Not a person to be seen,
He stalks through the night,
His body long and lean.
*
All of a sudden,
a monster picks him up.
Why to this cat?
Why pick him up?
*
Don't make him meow,
Don't make him mad.
Can't you see,
he doesn't want that!
I said no hugs for the cat.
Set him free!
*
Let him go! Let him go!
Put the cat back on the floor!
Let him go! Let him go!
You can't hold him up anymore!
I don't care, how much you love him!
Put the kitty down.
The kitty never loved you anyways!
*
It's funny how the kitty is so cute,
but all of a sudden,
he doesn't like you.
It's time to stop what you're doing,
to hug the cute cat one last time.
No, wait, no more hugs for him!
Set him free!
*
Let him go! Let him go!
Put the cat back on the floor!
Let him go! Let him go!
You can't hold him up anymore!
I don't care how much you love him!
Put the kitty down!
*
He starts to squirm in dissatisfaction.
He meows in terror and flattens his ears.
He somehow escapes the captor's grasp.
He's never coming back.
I hope he told you so!
*
Let him go! Let him go!
Put the cat back on the floor!
Let him go! Let him go!
You can't hold him up anymore!
I don't care, how much you love him!
Put the kitty down!
The kitty never loved you anyways.
Meow(Replace twinkle at the end with this)
KatyaElefant, thx for the follow...
I think the syllables are a bit weird. Please format it like Let it Go.
"Let him go! Let him go!
Put the cat back on the floor!
Let him go! Let him go!
You can't hold him up anymore!
I don't care,
how much you love him!
Put the kitty down!
The kitty never loved you anyways.
Meow(Replace twinkle at the end with this)"
This was good, and give my regards to Wolfare1!
Hi, it's Em101cats here!
Well, isn't this the quintessential parody for a person like me?
I don't have any real nitpicks. By "real nitpicks" I mean nitpicks you could easily fix. Like the way that I kinda had trouble fitting some of the lines into the tune without having to sing it really fast. But that may just be me and my jacked-up brain.
Another problem I have with this (but this is just ME) :
The kitty never loved you anyways.
Hello Katya, Wolf here as requested. So I remember writing this with you, so I do notice some major changes.
First off, the first line:
"The kitty walks down the hallway," should have tonight added on the end.
Next on the chorus:
"Let him go! Let him go!
Put the cat back on the floor!
Let him go! Let him go!
Do it before he scratches you!" This line is completely wrong. It's supposed to be 'You can't hold him up anymore."
Next paragraph:
"It's funny how the kitty is so cute,
but all of a sudden,
he doesn't like you." What? This doesn't even flow with the song! I can't blame you too much, because I can't remember what was there originally, but still. Here is how I'd do it:
"It's funny how this kitty
which is so cute,
can suddenly not want to
hug such a brute!" Alright, mine may not be that much better, but at least it flows with the song, and it rhymes. (Not that yours didn't.)
Next part:
"It's time to stop what you're doing,
to hug the cute cat one last time.
No, wait, no more hugs for him!
Set him free!" Okay, so the huge part of the song that is catchy is the rhyme. So I want to preserve that, and make it flow better. The first sentence is fine, but here's a rewrite of the middle two:
"to hug the cat and finally let him be.
No, just wait, no hugs for him!" The last line was fine.
Already went over the chorus... I also think the next paragraphs are fine. Good job! Some things I actually liked better than our original. The kitten <3 Hope he's doing fine now that he's free. I hope he's free. Enough ramble, nice job again! (I had forgotten about this, so good memory!) Keep Writing,
~Wolfare
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