Young Writers Society

Hello! I'm here for both "Adopt a novel" and a Review day review! (this is a copy pasted introduction, right.)

Hey, this isn't a good thing to start a review with, but did Robert just call somebody else a judgemental? Lol. Ha, it is so like him. Though, he did call someone egoistic before and acknowledge how big his ego is, so this WAS a bit strange.

So, Katie is a little bit dumb, yeah, but the way he acknowledges it is... lame. No, doesn't work for someone who sees himself as a this generation's prodigy. How can't he see that?

There was a line which just made me realise how he doesn't have any idea of his shallowness. Well, no idea if it's planned, but let me clear that out.

"I tried punching him in the balls but there was nothing there."

At first I thought he made this comment to get on Katie's lvl. After a few seconds, I realized he would prolly narrate if it was that way, which made me think this is him, real him. Well, not sure which effect you wanted.

Yeah, I knew it, this chapter is in between the sessions. This is just what I was talking about, he is working on his emotions, even if it is hte sexual preference alone. Gj, Dr. Greenway.

Oh, Katie is nympho? Not that significant, interesting one though.

"I am normal again. Hooray." Not sure if hes actually happy about it, eh?

Also, there is this paragraph where hes overrating himself so much. He is genius, irresitible, heh? The one he talks about how he is a 'flame to the moths'. Oh, Robbie how wrong you are.

-Alchemist

YO!

Firstly, love the title for this chapter. hee hee. XD
Opening with the lines you do, not only builds character, but reminds the reader exactly the type of person Robert is.

'Oh, the wonders of bad teaching.'

'Ello, back again. Once more, just going to treat this as a solo piece for the time being.

Nice start to the chapter with some sarcasm. I actually think it's fine without the exclamation point, because it seems to fit his character more. But that's just me.

...but they do not teach everything.

I could be at home masturbating...

And there she is- Katie Baxter, well known popular girl with an impressive body and a notorious track record.

"Heya, umm...Russell?" "Robert." "Ahh. Close enough." She giggles like the slutty schoolgirl she is.

I have the scent of an intellectual, which is incredibly hard to ignore. You'd have to be living in the Stone Ages to not consider me sexy...

Hey Adam ^^

Oh, the wonders of bad teaching.

but they do not teach everything.

"So, I have not read the book we're studying at all,