Hi Retro, it's me again! I have too say that even before I read this, I'm looking forward to it The title gives just enough info to make me want to read it, so props to you for that! So, shall we read?
Like pillows stuffed
with candyfloss gliding
Gaah, so much amazing detail! And adding the word "candy" makes me think of sweet, which goes with the idea of a kiss. I don't know if that international or not, but it worked either way.
That rush like adrenaline
Should "rush" be rushed, seeing as this was in the past?
OK so I finished, and if you asked me to give you my favorite part, I'd copy+paste the entire poem. You have this way with metaphors and detail, and description. It is so beautiful. You definitely have some true talent. I don't see a lot of poems with this much depth to them. This is something that I think people will/can relate to.
So yes, I basically can't say anything negative about it. I loved it. You write romantic poems that I actually enjoy (I'm no romance fan) so you must be doing something right! Really good job overall, I'm going to give you a like!
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