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Why Pandas Are Perfect

by BlueSunset


Pandas are cuddly,

They are sweet,

I'd like to hug them,

It would be a treat.

*

I'll rub their fur

Until I'm sure

That they won't bite me,

Or squeeze me tightly.

Pandas are perfect

Because they'll love you,

And cuddle you

Everyday.


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Sun Apr 10, 2016 12:18 pm
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Such a cute and innocent poem I see here!The feeling is amazing!So bad that we can not all hug pandas now! XD I WANT PANDAAA NOOOWW! Your poem in fault.
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Simple and well written.Good job!There are two or something there mistakes but that does not stop it from being amazing!
Overall,amazing.
Good job.




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Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww..........so cute!!!!!!!!!!!! I love pandas, and this poem has such a warm feeling of.......childishness and innocence that I can say nothing about it. It's a really sweet poem. Congrats on giving me warm, cuddly sensations! I want a panda! (but sadly, they're endangered and close to being extinct :( )

Keep it up! Write more!


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Thank you!!



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Sun Apr 20, 2014 12:33 am
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WHY DO I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!!!!? I mean it's so simple I could have written it when I was 7 but I just don't know!!! AWESOME!


Okay sorry about that . I literally was expecting some poem about racism and how pandas aren't racist because that seems to be trending right now but this was different. It was so simple and lovable and makes me want to hold a panda. I DO wish it was a little longer and more complex but like I said for some reason the shortness makes it have a nice childish appearance. I hope that doesn't offend you, I don't mean it that way. It kind of makes me feel like my stuffed animals and my cat and friends because whenever I'm sad I feel loved by them and they are nice and some of then are fuzzy :P

I do however think one tiny problem is you used they and it and it just bothers me. I prefer you keep using it or say he and keep it singular or plural but not both. That's just me being overly picky on such a lovely work though.

Keep it up, Kat




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Thank you.



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Sat Apr 19, 2014 10:38 pm
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Hey there. ^^

Pandas are cuddly,

They are sweet,


Combine these two lines.

I'll rub it's fur


Its*

I'll rub it's fur

Until I'm sure

That they won't bite me,

Or squeeze me tightly.


That makes no sense. When you are uncertain of something that will hurt you, you don't go and pet its fur >_>

Kay, so you gotta take off the rose-colored glasses when it comes to pandas. They aren't tame animals. They may look cute and cuddly, but I've no doubt that they won't claw your eyes out if they had the chance. >_> which is a shame, because they're sooo beautiful.

But I digress. Onto the poem itself.

You've got a weird rhyme scheme going here. It may be me and my dislike for most rhyme schemes, but I honestly didn't like it. I mean, "sweet" and "treat"? "Fur" and "sure"? Such basic rhyming words. It's just me, but I honestly think this poem would be a lot better without forcing the rhythm here.

But other than that, it was a cute message. I think you painted pandas in a nice light. I mean, no one can deny how cute they are, even if they aren't as, er, loving as you made them out to be. Well, they could be loving, like you said, but I doubt it. xD I can only hope that they are.

Overall, a nice poem. Hope this helps~




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Sat Apr 19, 2014 3:29 pm



But Koalas are better. :-)




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Love it! *hints to username




BlueSunset says...


Thanks! I love your username! :D



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thanks!



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lol, this was very straight to the point!

I have pet a panda before and I'll tell you they aren't as soft as they look xP But they are really sweeeet. <3 Keep dreaming and you'll get to pet one! xD




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I really want to!!!!!! :D



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its cute...keep writing




BlueSunset says...


I know..... It think I'm going to make my next poems longer.



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Renard says...



This is awesome.
I have a panda, and this is all true.
I will show him this to read. :)
Pandas <3




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:D



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I sure one of my school comrades would agree with this. She absolutely loves pandas.

It's cute. :)




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Thanks a lot!



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Pssh. This is soo true. Gotta hug one before you can say you've lived. :)




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Hey Sunset!
This was a very cute little poem! At first when I read this, I thought, dude, pandas can really hurt you! but then, what do you know! You mentioned bite me in there.

Pandas are cuddly,

They are sweet,

I'd like to hug one,

It would be a treat.


Lowercase 't' in they.

I'll rub it's fur

Until I'm sure

That they won't bite me,

Or squeeze me tightly.


Lowercase 'u' in until.
Lowercase 't' in they.
Lowercase 'o' in or.

Pandas are perfect

Because they'll love you,

And cuddle you

Everyday.


Lowercase 'b' in because.
Lowercase 'a' in and.
Lowercase 'e' in everyday.


Okay, so, wow. You really stated your opinion is so few words, and what? This is your first poem you've posted on here? wow! Nice job, Sun!

Keep writing, tell me when you publish more!

~ WillowPaw1




BlueSunset says...


Thank you! Since this was my first poem, I capitalized more, and it was a bit shorter than normal poems are.



WillowPaw1 says...


That's okay!
And I don't think you have to uncapitalize them... but I'm pretty sure



BlueSunset says...


Oh.... I might as well, if that is what some people think.



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I went through a phase where i only liked black and white animals so pandas, white tigers, penguins, and zebras are awesome :) but pandas are the best :)




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Cool. :D



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Messenger says...



!!!!!!!!!!!MY FAVORITE ANIMAL IS A PANDA BEAR!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE YOU!




BlueSunset says...


Really? Neat!




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