Young Writers Society

Hi there, Gaurav here for a review! Let's get started.

First of all, I must clearly mention that I am not a big fan of romance. I get bored when I read melodramatic romance. What really got my attention was the unusual title. [It may appear cliched to many, but it suits the poem perfectly.]

For a first time poet, this is a smashing debut. (When I posted my first story, I was universally panned, so don't get disheartened ) The poem has a great potential in my opinion. What you need is, some realism to it. The melodrama seems too much stretched to make an impact.

We talked, talked and talked again

It helped me to kindly go insane

The wording seems awkward here and a well settled momentum is lost. You need to correct this line.

You were my spring, best of my seasons

You left me alone, just give me a reason.

You were my spring, best of my seasons

You left me alone, you gave no reasons

You gave me joy, to my pains, an end

You were truly the best, God will ever send

I liked it. Remind me to review it if I don't within a day.

I think what you put here is depressing, but I'm exactly the same way, I love creativeness, and I think you are an amazing writer, just remember to never give up!! One thing I know about losing people is that it is the worst feeling in the world. I lost my best friend when I was ten, and I'm not sure I'll ever get over it. I write stories about our life together all of the time, and I'll post them so you see how I feel your pain. Your and amazing writer, just never forget that!(:
~Sparkles

Hey! XD

So this work has an interesting title, that progresses into an interesting work too.

However, the punctuation here is all over the place. Now, you have used ellipsis to pretty much the maximum amount you ever could.
Like here:
'It was my Love..! It is my Life……… '
and here:
'I just lost my Life…! As I lost my Love……… '
Which is fine, because it is relative to the motif line that you are using in this work.

However, I feel like the other lines require some level of punctuation as well.

I like what you've started doing here and you can just edit it to make it perfect.

Keep writing.

~BSF

Hey BitterRosemary here for a review. Let's get started.
Okay. This is interesting. But not great, sorry.
The punctuation and grammar is way off, which throws off the reader more than you might think.
It just feels like you're trying too hard to use an antiquated style of writing and it just doesn't work. As for the title and main theme, it makes no sense either. "It Was My Love...! It is my life..."
What?
I get that maybe you're trying to use clever grammar here and technically it is grammatically correct but it is unnecessarily confusing.
I liked the message, but the trying-too-hard end rhyme is just not working.
But, don't be discouraged, all our our firsts aren't that great! I see real potential in you! Never stop writing!!
~BitterRosemary