Hi, Em101cats here to review! (Because I'm broke on points right now, to be truthful )
Wow. Wow!!! Way to be CREATIVE! That's the first thing I have to say. I've never read something like this before, even from professional authors! GREAT WORK MAKING YOUR OWN ORIGINAL POEM!
Our grand kids will never grow tired of hearing them
I don't want to seem picky here, but 'grand kids' should be 'grandkids.' It's only one word. But that's a small error, don't worry about it.
One thing I want to say is you use the word "fade" a lot. I know you have an awesome vocabulary, try to use some of it to substitute some fades there! I know you can do it, you're a great writer!
When we have nothing left, we still have our stories.
This makes sense, but it doesn't make a lot of it. If you have NOTHING left, how do you still have the stories? Maybe you should try saying 'When we have nothing else left...' instead. To me that would make more sense. But it's your story, write it however you want!
I loved EVERYTHING else in this poem, however! Great great great great great job! I hope this review helps you!
~Em101cats
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