Hi there!
I just remembered what I forgot to say in my review of like, chapter 6. So I'll put it in this review since it relates to this chapter as well as the others.
First of all, I like this chapter. We have a new character here that we need to get to know better. It doesn't matter that that character is a dog. Mousse is going to be a huge part of Ember's life, so it's important that we get to know him more. Seeing the relationship between Ember and Mousse and Sheila and Mousse is very interesting. Maybe Sheila was still feeling bad and that's why she didn't pet Mousse more than a few times. But then again, maybe she's just not that excited about Mousse as Ember is. To Ember, Mousse is a miracle. And comparing him to Braille, her other miracle, is genius. I love that comparison. It really shows how much Mousse means to Ember that she would pick Mousse over Braille.
I like that there is more about Ember's family in this chapter. Sure we still haven't seen her father or her brother in a while, but it's a start. It's not just "Ember taking on the world" in this chapter. It's Ember taking on the world with the help of her family. That's what I like about this.
Okay, so what I forgot to mention in other reviews is that Ember's mother seems way too calm and understanding about the whole Ember being blind thing. Even though Ember has been blind by birth, I feel like her mother would still get frustrated about certain things sh does. And Ember would probably get frustrated too. We see a bit of frustration from the mother in this chapter which is good. I want to see more of that. Right now their lives just seem to be perfect. Well, not perfect, but you know what I mean. I want to see more of the struggles of being blind and living with a blind person. Life isn't wonderful and perfect all the time. You know that. Try and get that to show through in your story.
Keep writing!
**Noelle**
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