Young Writers Society

Such a beautiful poem! Really well written. Thoroughly enjoyed it.

Hello!
Finally getting around to reviewing this!
I thought this was a very sweet poem. I liked the story, and the part about the rose. I liked the simplicity of this. It really was wonderful.
It kind of reminded me of a hallmark card, if you know what I mean, though, so I don't know if that's what you were going for, the cheesy, sappy-sweet poem, or if you wanted it to be a little less-so.
I thought the second stanza wasn't really necessary, but it does provide clarity. It think this poem would be much more powerful if you really cut it down. Like, by a lot. Like maybe down to two stanzas? I don't know if you would find that possible. Your reader really understands what's going on, so they don't need you to carefully explain it to them.
I love the ending.
Great poem, keep writing, sorry I didn't have anything real constructive to say about this poem, but I think it's pretty great as is.
~fortis

Okay wow.

I came here to critique this but HOW CAN I? This was so beautifully written ;_;

Like seriously, the topic of this poem alone would've been emotional enough, but you explained it in such a beautiful way that it was even more moving. The comparison of the father and a rose, plus the mirror, was genius. It helped us understand what the point of the poem was without overdoing it.

I loved the imagery. I loved how you showed the father as a rose, and him being able to only see the ugly stem of the rose when his daughter was only seeing the top. That was a beautiful way to show us what each of them saw, and how they understood what they were seeing. Flipping the mirror was also beautiful, as it showed us how the daughter wanted her father to see the good side of him, not the bad side.

Overall, this was wonderful. Beautifully written, with a strong flow and a clear message that was conveyed through awesome examples. I loved it. Thank you for sharing and happy Review Day!

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Not much to say here at all. Sorry.

If anything, I've always been one for punctuation at the end of lines. Without it it feels halting and abrupt, almost.

Your imagery and descriptions are great--lucid and sweet and altogether well done.

You truly did a wonderful job on this, and there really is not much at all I can find grammatically incorrect.

Great job! Sorry again, but that's the best I can do.

~Rainn

Hey there! Purple here to give you a review! Let's get started.
This is really sweet and I'm really fond of the rose metaphor you used throughout. This could even relate to any adoration outside of parents or adults, but anyone you look up to really. It starts off really sentimental and stays simple. The only complaint I would have is that you don't list his flaws. The reader is stuck invisioning this blank man with nothing special about him but there's also nothing apparently wrong with him. Maybe edit and insert a couple stanzas describing what he thinks are his flaws. My favorite part would have been
"He is like a rose,
looking in a mirror
pointed downward.
So that all he can see
is a big green stem"
That was really powerful. Keep up the fantastic writing and have a nice day!
~Purple

Hi! I hope you don't mind me typing a review on this poem of yours
So this poem...It's amazing ^o^ This can relate to many people. Like for example, I wanted to be like my mom ever since she has been working at this hotel for longer than a decade. But my mom denied me, and there are many reasons why I shouldn't end up like her. I can see the similarity between my mom and me, and the father and his daughter.
But again, this is a lovely poem. And I hope you keep up the good work with your oh-so amazing talents on writing poems, stories, and etc.