Young Writers Society

Hey there! Purple here to review for you! HAPPY REVIEW DAY!! Let's get started.
This was sufficiently original despite it based off an already existing book. I quite enjoyed this even though the main thought running through my head was "If he sits on the egg..wouldn't it break???" Anyway, this was cute! It's like children's book fan fiction haha! One general nitpick: punctuation/capitalization. I don't think you should capitalize every line because imagine if this was in book-format; only the first word of each new sentence is capitalized. The punctuation is usually a problem that can be corrected, like this
"He sat on an egg that was not his
for hours, and days,
then weeks, and months." It just gives a little grammatically correct pause in there that helps with flow and general reading. There's more like this throughout but nothing too major.
I hope this helped and have a happy review day!
~Purple

Flame here! A little late, but here nonetheless. Okay, a lot late. But I'll compensate with...hmm. What will I compensate with? That like was well-deserved, the gushing's well-deserved, and on account of having run dry of nitpicks, this review's brief.

Horton Hears a Who is one of my favorite Dr. Seuss books. How could it not be? Endless gratitude for you requesting in my thread. Can't let dust coat this little gem.

But I'd've loved this even if it wasn't based off Horton. Sometimes the simpler words have deeper meaning. Your line breaks were also...wow. I can't stop admiring them. I could take a ruler to this poem, and you still managed to break after prepositions, predicates, periods, commas, and significant ideas. Especially this stanza:

He made a promise.
And that promise he would keep.
Even when his tree was moved
To some circus on Balm Beach.
Where the gawking grew worse.

kind hearted

Because elephant's don't sit in trees.

But kindness knows no bounds.

This is a very beautiful poem! I loved every moment of it! Some lines were a little awkward, but I'm here to help with that. I truly am never going to forget this poem, ever. Mayzie the lazy bird...

But that never happened

Couldn't even wait for her child

Horton, the kind hearted elephant,
Happy to help his friend.
Was left all alone in a tree
To be laughed at and teased
Because elephant's don't sit in trees.

Hey! ajruby here to review!

Nit-picky stuff first..

1." Instead she gave the task" I believe there should be a comma between "instead" and "she".

2. "Happy to help his friend.
Was left all alone in a tree" The punctuation is off there. In fact, there are several more places where the punctuation should be changed. That's something to be careful of.

Now positive stuff! (Your favorite part, huh?)

I really like how you based this off of the book (which I happen to love, btw.) and I think that the whole thing is great! With a few tweaks and adjustments, I think this could be perfect!

So keep up the good work! Happy review day and may the reviews be ever in your favour!

-Lady Ariana

Genius. I liked how you took a children's book and made it so meaningful. Personally, I've not read the book, nor have I seen the movie. I thought this poem was excellent, however. So kudos to you!

I have a few nitpicks. (Shocker, I know). Your rhyme scheme, or lack thereof, is off. Sometimes you rhyme. For example.

His compassion was great.
Great enough for him to wait
And wait and wait and wait
For a bird that wouldn't come.
But kindness knows no bounds.