Young Writers Society

Hey strange!
Poor little Bieber people making hate poems about him. Of course it is funny though XD
Just a short review for a short poem, generally your grammar and all is fine and dandy, your description is a little bit bland but I can tell this is just a joke and is not all serious
My only complaint is the third line seems to go on for quite a bit, too many syllables. Maybe you could shorten it a little bit?
See you around dreamy!

I'm laughing too hard to review. Thank you, I needed that.

lol

First off, I have to agree with Iggy, the format is not right. But what the heck, it's funny.

I know I've pretty much already reviewed this for you, (but for the sake of getting the point...*cough cough*) but I'll do it again.

I can't say that I much care for little girly boys who dress up in women's clothing and wear makeup. (Did I just say that?) Especially when they are "popular" and it's changing the way women think of men, which actually has been going on for quite awhile now.

I love your use of the "Bieber Fever" to ridicule, very creative.

"And turned into a diva."

When a song comes on, on Pandora's radio (and I'm not staring at the screen,) and I think to myself, "Ehh, the song's not bad, the girl's actually a pretty good singer." Then I go and look who it is and see a guy's (.....did I just say guy?) face, it's actually a little bit demoralizing to know that I'm, supposedly, of the same species and gender. Well, that's a lie...it's humiliating. When did women stop looking for strong, powerful men who could bring home the bacon and started wanting little sissy boys with tight pants, earrings, and a "I just got my balls kicked out by a mule!" voice?

Note: Very momentous occasion! As of the last two weeks, I have not so much as said CRAP on here, so my usage of the word balls (HA! Said it again) is to say that this was worth it!

And if that's not a good enough review, I don't know what is!

Thank you Strange!

Hi Strange!

So I'm no poet, but I'm pretty sure this isn't a limerick. See, a limerick is a poem that is five lines long, with the rhyme sequence of ABBAA. The first, fourth, and fifth lines much rhyme, while the second and third must rhyme. You've only four lines here, and the only two that rhyme are the first two sentences.

This is also lacking the rhythm. Limericks follow a precise rhythm that puts emphasis on certain words or syllables to bring it out and put more focus on it. This is the rhythm:

da DUM da da DUM da da DUM
da DUM da da DUM da da DUM
da DUM da da DUM
da DUM da da DUM
da DUM da da DUM da da DUM