Hi! here to review.
Well, this is a clear view on society's teen girls and you've put across your opinion well throughout this poem. I like that you're very descriptive and understand this topic very well. But there is always room for improvement.
"Groups of teenage girls with
Ruffley skirts too short for our age."
Here, there are a few punctuation and grammatical errors;
The word "ruffley" is spelled incorrectly, it's meant to be ruffly.
You say "our age" but you started with a different tense/persons, you're talking about the teenage girls but addressing the skirts to yourself.
The capital letters are a bit awkward in this, making the flow off and confusing to read when they're in the same sentence as the lower cased letters.
"Artistic interpretation or crooked eyeliner? Or are those crooked smiles?"
I liked this sentence as it made you think about the thinking behind makeup and how make-up is used to hide flaws.
Overall a good poem, keep writing!
-Infinity x
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