Wooh. Nice job. Review l for you. And just as as disclaimer I didn't bother to read the previous reviews and comments so my bad if I repeat anything that's already been said.
First, the positives.
I really liked the way that this poem was written. Your diction and word choice are both outstanding here and I like the idea of a single door between two potential lovers. It's a very interesting exploration of the human condition in a way. A closer look at this poem compels the reader to l dive deeper into exactly what is being said. If you skin through this, you still get the general point of it. However, intensely reading you find yourself wondering the very things the narrator does. Does the person behind the door even love then? Do they just like the idea of a relationship? Or does the narrator even want to open the door to find out? There's a lot going on in here, but ou can still pick up the jist of it if you skim. That's just something I always look for in poetry is if u can still understand it, but that you need to read harder and look a little closer in order to really come away with a poetic experience. Good job.
Now, the negatives. (There's only one )
The only real error I can think of was with your formatting. I noticed that some of your lines were long enough that they were force to indent by the narrow margin of this yws page. (Dinkelbergggg) this happens to me pretty much every time I write a poem with slightly longer lines, so I definitely get how that's out I your control. In some spots, it even adds I the poems effect, but in others I think it throws off the rhythms you might have wants to produce. I realize this isn't a lyrical poem, but I believe some sort of a rhythms is nice when employed into free verse. Other than that , great job. I see why this poem is so popular on here!
-GL24
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