Young Writers Society

I'm not exactly sure
Where you are right now
You may be in your room
Or you may still be at school
But wherever you are
I'm too far away
And I want to be with you

I don't know who you're with
At this exact moment
Or What you may be doing
As you're going about your day
But whoever it is, or whatever you're doing
I hope that something somewhere
Is reminding you of me

I don't know what you're thinking about
Right at this very moment
Perhaps something random
Or something very important
But I hope you know
That right here, right now
My thoughts are always with you

So I guess this is just a long way
Of putting my thoughts into words
When I can just say it simply:
Wherever you are
Whatever you're doing
Whoever you're with
Know that I love you.

i feel exactly like that right now. i probably woudln't have liked this poem so much if it didn't describe so exactly how i feel.

the good thing about poetry is you feel like you are speaking to the person without ever having to speak to them. if that makes sense?

is this about someone real? do they feel the same way back?

god i am so nosey. ignore me!

Yeah. It's about someone real. *smiles thinking of him* And yes, he feels the same way.

I wrote this because he's currently a couple hundred miles away since I'm on Spring Break.

Are there any changes that you would make?

he feels the same way? that isn't fair! #dies of envy#

i think i would change the first verse. it just didn't GRAB me. i think the poem is pretty simple, simple language and stuff so it's hard to change because any changes that make it more complicated would ruin it. but i think the first verse is just too blah...work on the emotions in it so that it jumps out at the reader. i can't give you any concrete ideas on how to change it because it's your poem.....

does that make ANY sense whatsoever?!

*laughs* hey! I did my fair share of waiting for him to fall for me as hard as I'd fallen for him... I waited for almost a year and a half...

And yeah, your comments make sense. I'll try and work up a revision for the first stanza. Thanks for reading!

But whoever it is, or whatever you're doing
I hope that something somewhere
Is reminding you of me


This is my favorite part. I really like this poem altogether. I feel that way a lot, so I can sympathize. Or perhaps I should say...I dunno. Not sympathize, but understand how it feels to be so obsessed.