Young Writers Society

to go along with me short story Walk with me which I'll post soon. This is from the view of Maria (pronounced Mariah) to Dan. And it's layout, formatting is based off of Paul Eluard's poem Je t'aime. I have no idea even if I am going to title it. At first I think not, maybe if someone comes up with something that would be great.

cheers CL

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I love you for all the people you’ve touched
I love you for all the times in which you’ve lived for me
For the charcoal breath of angels and the fragrance of marigolds
For the soft summers and moonlit walks
For the innocence you let me believe in
I love you to love
I love you for all the people I can not love
Because I love you so deeply
Without you I am nothing but a porcelain doll
Forgotten and nostalgic in the right light
There have been times I wished I could scream at you for
I have not been able to love through your sheltering and that
Crushes me
I’ve had to learn life through others (mostly you)
How one forgets
To live, to love on their own
I love you for your knowledge and wisdom which will never be mine
For sketches
I love you against everything you have done
The pushing and pulling, the illusion of apathy
For the immortal sense that this is a-once-in-a-lifetime love which I have no power over
You think that you are unworthy but you are a kindersavior
You are the moments of fluttering butterflies that caress
my insides at the most intimate of moments
When I know I love you

There are far too many repetitions of the word 'love' and variations of the word love...yick yuck.

I'm getting Hallmark card, dunno about you.

Find some synonyms for the word love and the word live, and spend time in your local card shop reading the valentine's day cards until you are completely and thoroughly nauseated.

That, I find, helps me write. When I have a bad example to work off of.

thats how the poem is supposed to be written. yah cheesy but I liked it sort of. thanks for the review.