hey everyone. i've decided to continue a story i've been working on and there's going to be numerous instances of close quarters combat involving hand-to-hand and hand weapons such as swords. i've been told that my writing style when it comes to combat makes the action come off as the script of a stage play. in other words, i'm too descriptive. here's an example of this:
Andrew raised his sword over his head and brought it down, meaning to cleave his enemy's head in two. His opponent brought his hand ups and caught the blade between them, quickly forcing the blade to the side, causing Andrew to stumble and lose his grip. Andrew drew his dagger from its sheath while his opponent flipped the sword end-for-end, grasping the hilt. Andrew knew he had to keep the distance close and lunged at the man. Etc.
is this too descriptive? i mean, is combat like this exciting to read, given that the plot and involved characters are interesting? or should i be more vague and compress the action to keep the plot moving?
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