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Sun Dec 25, 2011 12:35 am
dasiamari says...



Okay so your in a car with a person sitting next to you. Their phone rings they answer it. You get the idea of the phone call even though you can't here what one person is saying right?
So how do you write that? How do you write the person answering the questions and things? And still get the idea of the phone call.
~ Thanks I hope someone can help me ~Dmari :D
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Sun Dec 25, 2011 2:26 pm
Blues says...



Well sometimes you can hear the other person. In the UK, you aren't allowed to hold your mobile while Driving, so maybe they could be listening through the loudspeaker. Also, maybe if they are holding it, maybe it could be on the same side as the person who is also there

Anyway, either way, you could write it like this:

"I told you what to do, and yet again you don't listen ... Where is he now? Where has he gone? .. WHAT DO YOU MEAN YOU DON'T KNOW?

If the character can't hear the other, then just write what one person is saying and while the other person is saying it, just put an ellipsis (three dots: ...). That's what I do anyway.




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Tue Dec 27, 2011 1:34 am
dasiamari says...



Thanks I did this in one story but a person said I shouldn't write a conversation like this guess they were wong
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Tue Dec 27, 2011 1:39 am
dasiamari says...



*wrong
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Tue Dec 27, 2011 1:41 am
Rosey Unicorn says...



There is no such thing as "wrong" in fiction. The reviewer was probably complaining about the way you'd handled it (phone conversations and dialogue are notoriously difficult to do right) and just said not to do it for ease of explaining.

There is always asking who is calling at the start of the conversation, letting the conversation go on naturally (Or, in narration, so you're not writing out a million small things) then having the driver ask what the conversation is about. That's usually how it goes in my house, anyway. Somebody answers the phone, everybody else politely eavesdrops, then asks what the details were once the person has hung up.

Also, if you ever want to correct a post you've made, feel free to just use the "Edit" button at the bottom and make the change needed. :)
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Wed Dec 28, 2011 1:43 am
dasiamari says...



Thanks! I couldn't find the button!! :D
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