How do I make my action suspenseful? How do I make the reader on the edge of their seat? And, really, how do I put any on paper? That is my main concern.
A sample of my writing, so you see what my style is like.
Behind her ran the scrolvs. Ten of them, armed to the teeth, waving axes about like they were as light as toothpicks. If she was going to survive, there was only one place she could go. Out of the auditorium.
Through the maze of tables and tile she ran—jumping, rolling, and ducking. The scrolvs were incessant, but at least her reflexes were more acute. By the time the scrolvs reacted, she was way ahead.
The door was ahead of her. Glass cracked, hanging on one hinge. The culprit table lay on the ground nearby, corner smashed. But it had done its work.
She pushed, shoving against the bent frame. The metal screeched against the concrete, scratching it as it crept open. And then stopped against a rise in the concrete, refusing to budge.
Before she could move from the place, a scrolv loomed over her. His axe poised to split her to the waist.
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