Interesting. I especially like the ending. "They think it is obscene. I think it is a work of art." I like how his opinion clashes so much with his "friends" Its so interesting because they are talking about screwing people and he is trying not to get engaged in the conversation. Yet, what there speaking is "obscene." And Robert isn't necessarily voicing his options about girls and screwing them. They have dirty minds AND mouths while his, in comparison, isn't nearly as bad.
Very good work. I liked how real the character was and how engaging the story became because of his excellent voice. When the friends came in it was a little confusing but not to much, It only took a second to see what was going on. I'm wondering something, is he in love with a childhood sweetheart that is launching all of these feelings? Is that why he went back? Why did he go back in the first place? Anyway just some things to think about. Loved the story over all though.
Keep writing!
~Berlyn Rae
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