Young Writers Society

this is Iliana: my friend drew her for me. she's a character in my story - a bard. I coloured it in in paint shop pro 7 and added the text. hope you like!

You should blacken the outline, the pencil makes it look unfinished.

I really like it! You are really an artist!

I like the overall peice, but it definately has some issues. Her arms are WAY too long, and her legs are way too short. Bad mixture. The dress isn't flowing naturally down her body line. It might help if some natural creases were connected to the wrinkles that at the bottom of the dress. The scarf has been drawn sort of funny. All of a sudden, it just randomly gets wider on the bottom on both sides. Her left hand is the correct size, but it seems as if the bones that are in the hand were someone forgotten. The right hand needs to be the same size as the left hand.
The nose is a bit too high, but thats really not a noticeable detail unless you're OCD (yeah.... I sort of am ) The instrument seems perportionate, except for the top. All of a sudden, it went from being 3-D and having some deapth to it to having no deapth whatsoever and appearing completely flat. Her shoulders are WAY too wide. Its sort of like shoulder pads gone wild, but for the wrong year. I like the eyes. Unfortunately, she doesn't have any wrists at the present moment, nor does she seem to have correctly perportioned elbows. The upper arm is always going to be a teensie bit bigger than the forearm.

Anyway, thats just my opinion. I'm not a professional artists/art critiquer, so it may not be the uber best idea ever to trust me The coloring is cool, by the way.

I liked this. It kind of looks a little fuzzy and unfinished. Maybe if you fixed that it would look awesome. Good job it takes a lot to draw something! I just finished a little girl and it took me sooooo long! Well anyway great job!

I noticed that the rays of sunlight kindof contrast with the outline of her and the coloring in itself. I would suggest getting rid of the rays of light or redoing the outline, instead of a fuzzy kindof texture, try something solid. And yeah... I mimic what stirl said. Sorry... I guess me and her are sort of... in stirly's words, "OCD" Yes we are perfectionists when it comes to art.

hats off to you and yorfriend.

Hey this is nice.......well done!!