Young Writers Society

Okay. This is my first comic.... on YWS so please critt. I ranked it R because of the sexual comments etc...

These comics tell the story of the lives of data... on Jake's computer..l. and the computer is a Mapple. =P

I'm not good at drawing so be gentel on that area... please


These are drafts

hee hee...

Your actual jokes are awesome and your drawings aren't bad at all - but it's unclear. You should make clear outlines between boxes and better indications of which data is saying which dialogue box. I've already read your other R-rated one and the same thing applies - the second one especially was HILARIOUS!!! but still unclear.

So anyway, sharpen up the lines, clear away the messy bits, and you'll boil it down to pure awesomeness.

Cheers!
MademoiselleKool

lol, funny, it is unclar with the lines and stuff but im useless at drawing comics so youll always be better than me! Those people talking... they lok so funny and cute - what are they? heads? lololol
really liked it, going to reveiws some of your other stuff now! keep up the good work

Awsome dude how did you send your jokes on this website? I want to do that too!
Great job. This joke made me happy!

This is awesome! I have no idea how to draw, so these are amazing to you. Nice work. Keep it up. Lol.

Jamie