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Kasai Tora 2



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Mon Oct 29, 2007 9:08 pm
The Misfit Prince says...



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Cut my wrists, close me eyes, stab my heart, say your goodbyes X

Here i am, standing there, seeing you in all my prayers.
Take my hand, we'll run away, i love you is all ill say.
  





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Mon Oct 29, 2007 9:15 pm
The Misfit Prince says...



read right to left
Cut my wrists, close me eyes, stab my heart, say your goodbyes X

Here i am, standing there, seeing you in all my prayers.
Take my hand, we'll run away, i love you is all ill say.
  





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Mon Oct 29, 2007 9:42 pm
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Neat drawing!! :D
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Mon Oct 29, 2007 10:32 pm
Via says...



I would really like...faces? The only one that kind of has a face is the top left frame. The others, even the ones that you can actually see the face don't have one. This one seems much less detailed than the first one. Okay, though...I see where you are going with it.
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Tue Oct 30, 2007 3:21 pm
Rydia says...



I think you should try to be a little more consistent with your style. Add some shading and more detail to this one. The plot is a little easier to understand though and please don't add 'read left to right' as an extra post each time. Just type that after the image URL. I think the close up of the fist is very nice and I like the guy's hair in that bottom image.
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