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Sat Jul 14, 2007 12:12 pm
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Sat Jul 14, 2007 3:23 pm
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Sat Jul 14, 2007 4:13 pm
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For a first draft it's pretty good but the final is certainly much better. You made some nice improvements and it's interesting to see how you advanced this image.
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Tue Jul 17, 2007 12:24 am
Alice says...



oh my wow, thats awesome anamie. This is only the first draft? So I assume you're looking for suggestions, hm... let me see.

Do the second draft on drawing paper.
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Tue Jul 17, 2007 1:48 am
Via says...



The hand holding the...thing...is very large.

Also, I realize the hair is there to make a point, but having some piece of an eye stick out somewhere would probably be a good idea.

Interested in the final piece.
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