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Worst Ending line EVER!



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Sat Jun 30, 2007 6:56 pm
JC says...



The monster ran up, yelling that he was going to kill her! Then his foot got stuck in a hole and he fell to the ground while the girl ran away to live happily ever after.

(God...that really sucks!) lis.

-JC =D
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Sat Jul 07, 2007 2:50 am
Firearris says...



My fave is
"Oh my god! Did I kill you?


She almost fell asleep, a firework went up in the air and fell, it caught the forest on fire! (What happens next is up to you!)


Fire
[Griffinkeeper] 10:45 pm: The guard appears "We have weasels now!"
[Firearris] 10:45 pm: askes the guard for the weasel!
[Griffinkeeper] 10:45 pm: The guard gives Firearris the Weasel.
[Firearris] 10:46 pm: aquires the weasel and renames it "Cat"

Take that, Lumi.
  





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Sat Jul 07, 2007 2:55 am
Alice says...



"Oh my god," she breathed, now knowing that it didn't really happen, "i'm going to the loonly bin aren't I?"
I just lost the game.
  





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Sun Jul 08, 2007 3:07 pm
Lynlyn says...



miyaviloves wrote:"And no one knew what happened to them."


The thing is, I've actually read books like that. There was one by Margaret Peterson Haddix or someone like that where the book ended with the character jumping off of a rock and wondering if she would hit the ground without breaking her ankle. Something like, "she fell through the air, hoping she would be all right when her feet touched the ground. She thought she would."
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Mon Sep 17, 2007 7:42 am
bubblewrapped says...



"All was well."

Guess where that's from >.<
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Mon Sep 17, 2007 7:53 am
Loose says...



Boom!
  








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