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Birathi: The City of Light



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Mon Sep 23, 2013 1:48 am
AlmondEyes says...



Dante wrote:
Cailey wrote:Good question. I guess I can start the meeting since no one else seems to want to post. :D


@Stellabeam: If you post before I do tomorrow, it's time to get Razley and Kati talking. Oh and Razley talks about herself in the third person unless she's casting spells.



Same with my character as well. Except with the whole third person thing :)
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Mon Sep 23, 2013 10:23 pm
KingLucifer says...



@Stellabeam let me know if you want me to edit anything.

@Janika, Razley and Katiian are going to the library, you could have your character follow or wait until they get back.

@Everyone else, let me know when Razley's cuteness factor has gone though the roof, also, I think I found a liking to third person view.
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Tue Sep 24, 2013 12:07 am
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Writing in third person does make it easier for portray a person's thoughts and feeling along with putting another person's views in. At least, that's my opinion :) I'm working on a post right now.
"What is dead my never die, but rises again, larger and stronger..."

*Ride like Lightening, crash like Thunder*


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Tue Sep 24, 2013 2:06 am
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I have to admit though, I always forget that I'm writing in third person and I accidentally switch to first person. I had to reread my post several times to change all the 'I's to 'him's. :D
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Tue Sep 24, 2013 2:17 am
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I've been having the same problem :)
"What is dead my never die, but rises again, larger and stronger..."

*Ride like Lightening, crash like Thunder*


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Wed Sep 25, 2013 3:13 am
Stellabeam says...



Hai!

Sorry guys for the delay. I've been super busy lately but should get a post in tomorrow morning.

@Dante The post was fine. Talking about self in 3rd person reminds me of my 3 year old little sister and Elmo on Sesame Street. For someone her age it's not cute but childish and annoying. That's how we think about it (Katii and I )
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Wed Sep 25, 2013 12:13 pm
KingLucifer says...



Stellabeam wrote:Hai!

Sorry guys for the delay. I've been super busy lately but should get a post in tomorrow morning.

@Dante The post was fine. Talking about self in 3rd person reminds me of my 3 year old little sister and Elmo on Sesame Street. For someone her age it's not cute but childish and annoying. That's how we think about it (Katii and I )


I plan on explaining why she is like this eventually, it just takes the right question and a little bit of annyence from somebody.
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Wed Sep 25, 2013 1:47 pm
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I want to go on with the next post, but I'll wait until later today to give @Stellabeam and @NightWolf a chance to post first.
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Wed Sep 25, 2013 6:58 pm
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I lied. I might not have internet this afternoon. If i don't post by this evening go one without me.
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Thu Sep 26, 2013 8:41 pm
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Hey, @Skyguy, your post was good, and I like the twist, but you ended it saying that Tris rode of to go investigate something.

They're about to leave on a quest. In like, half an hour. There is no way anyone would let her leave the palace when they're about to start their journey. Could you please edit that??

Also- can you explain again why humans can't enter to forest? That was really confusing, and needs to be made clear considering this quest will probably take them through the forest- and humans are represented in the quest.
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Thu Sep 26, 2013 8:52 pm
Skyguy says...



Consider it done!!!
I will never give up... I will never give up! As long as I'm still breathing in this world... as long as I'm still standing in this world I will never give up!
  





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Thu Sep 26, 2013 9:00 pm
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Awesome! Thank you!
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Sun Sep 29, 2013 7:15 am
Yunalesca says...



Hola!! Just to let you guys know, this is Janika. I'll be posting under this name sometimes and just wanted to go give you guys a heads up :)
*Sore wa tsudzuku* "It goes on"
  





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Sun Sep 29, 2013 1:52 pm
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*Miniature heart attack* Two names? So confusing...

I mean, okay, cool, that's fine. Thanks for letting us know. :D
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Sun Sep 29, 2013 2:01 pm
KingLucifer says...



Where the heck is Nightwolf?
An angel, a knight, a man who will bring light to where there is only darkness, I am the Morning Star, the Bringer of Light, hail to me as I am King Lucifer!

Formerly: Avalon
  








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