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Sat Feb 04, 2012 7:33 pm
NicholasStone says...



Here it is! Talk all you want.
He stumbled slightly, the limp in his leg still there. He dared not to look at the place he used to call home. He could feel the heat from the fire, the fire that he himself had ignited. He blinked back tears, as he limped away.




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Sat Feb 04, 2012 7:40 pm
Stellabeam says...



yayy!!! This could help a lot because on one part of the story Veltra and Scarlett saved Smaug from death in a different way and when reading it didn't make a whole lot of sense. This could (hopefully) prevent it from happening again.
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Sat Feb 04, 2012 7:44 pm
Pilot says...



Yeah, that was sorta confusing.
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Sat Feb 04, 2012 8:43 pm
SkyeDragon says...



Awesome, now we can exchange ideas through this, since we can't talk through the storybook.
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Sun Feb 05, 2012 2:59 pm
Stellabeam says...



quick question. I just finished reading the part when Veltra is being taken. Is he taken by goblins or trolls?

Now an idea and since there was a fork in the road and not everyone was all together maybe we can get seperated?
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Sun Feb 05, 2012 3:24 pm
Stellabeam says...



Also Ugh the troll is Scarlett's pet now so he might be useful in battle scenes
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Sun Feb 05, 2012 3:58 pm
Pilot says...



I won't be active in the story until Veltra is found, due to the spell he is under, and he is slowly dying from his shattered ribcage (ribs are poking through skin and puncuring vital organs).
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Sun Feb 05, 2012 9:14 pm
SkyeDragon says...



yikes, ok...
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Mon Feb 06, 2012 10:16 pm
NicholasStone says...



Ok, so Veltra was never with Nicholas, he just got kidnapped by a troll. But Nicholas thought he got kidnapped by goblins, so he goes after some goblins.
He stumbled slightly, the limp in his leg still there. He dared not to look at the place he used to call home. He could feel the heat from the fire, the fire that he himself had ignited. He blinked back tears, as he limped away.




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Mon Feb 06, 2012 10:19 pm
Pilot says...



To clarify things, Veltra was kicked into a bush by a troll. Goblins who were going to attack kidnapped Veltra, and brought him to their base, miles away. Veltra meets the forest bandits' leader, a half troll half goblin creature that is as smart as a human. Now most of the group is out to find and rescue Veltra, unaware of the challenge, danger, and traps that have been laid ahead.
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Mon Feb 06, 2012 10:20 pm
NicholasStone says...



ok that's easier
He stumbled slightly, the limp in his leg still there. He dared not to look at the place he used to call home. He could feel the heat from the fire, the fire that he himself had ignited. He blinked back tears, as he limped away.




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Mon Feb 06, 2012 10:22 pm
Pilot says...



Yes, thus I mentioned it.
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Mon Feb 06, 2012 10:25 pm
SkyeDragon says...



Ok....I think I have that. I was confused by the events earlier...
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Tue Feb 07, 2012 8:06 pm
Stellabeam says...



I'm wayyyyyyyyy to confused for words contiune on without me until I can find a place to jump on again.
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Wed Feb 08, 2012 8:58 pm
SkyeDragon says...



I know! good grief...could we just pretend that this never happened and just move onto another part of the forest? Cause I'm just waiting for sense to make an appearance...
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