Hey everyone. I failed to mention this originally, but your character is going to fall into a tunnel of some sort and that is how they are moved to earth from their planet. You may follow my version, although since you characters are all from different places, (Exception of one @thelostone which can make up her own reason for being at the store.) it may be a different layout.
@Cailey, I think you could use a little more detail on when Torkon falls in the water. IT seems like he just stands there silently, flailing his arms around.
Haja, okay, I'll do that. I wasn't entirely sure what you wanted them to fall through, so I was trying to leave it pretty vague. But then I checked the DT and you said some kind of tunnel, so I'll go add some more.
A non-writing writer is a monster courting insanity. -Kafka
So do we wake up or come to or whatever in the store? Or just outside of it and are drawn into it for whatever reason? *I could just wait until you post again, but I'm impatient and like to plan my post.*
Also, totally unrelated, and I really don't want to sound picky, but this is one of my pet peeves. When two people are talking, each time the speaker switches there should be a new paragraph. Sorry, it's just one of my things, like lowercase i instead of I.
A non-writing writer is a monster courting insanity. -Kafka
First off, was going to speak to @ajruby12 about that.
Secondly, I have been thinking on your first question, a lot. I am thinking that what will happen is that we will just kind of poof!, right at the entrance of the store. On the inside.
Alright, that sounds like a good idea, and easy to explain- so we don't need to get confused about finding out why they go into the story instead of walking somewhere else.
A non-writing writer is a monster courting insanity. -Kafka
Also I'm just forewarning you, I'm not always the best at posting on a DT. I will do my best though. 
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