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Wed Jul 22, 2009 10:03 pm
October Girl says...



**I really have no idea what to write. And to top it all off my kitty just died :( I don't think I'll be posting today.**
We're meant to be one
I know we are...
If I am the Sky
Then you are my star... ™





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Wed Jul 22, 2009 10:07 pm
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TNCowgirl says...



****THAT STINKS!!!!!!!!! DO a time post when you can write, maybe to when she goes into labor or something. I wont be getting on much today anyway so it's ok. I'm SO SO SO SO SO SO SO SO SO SO sorry****
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Fri Jul 24, 2009 3:20 am
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October Girl says...



**Ihave no idea what to post. Sorry TN :(
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Fri Jul 24, 2009 12:44 pm
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****I'll post later****
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Sat Jul 25, 2009 4:19 am
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October Girl says...



**OK
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Sat Jul 25, 2009 4:20 am
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October Girl says...



**OK
We're meant to be one
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If I am the Sky
Then you are my star... ™





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Sat Jul 25, 2009 9:48 pm
TNCowgirl says...



***Nine months later.ish. :P ***

Dawn woke up in the middle of the night her stomach killing her. It had been happening all of yesterday. She didn't want to worry Dante though. She wasn't sure it was anything. She sighed when teh pain stopped and then it started up again a few minutes later more severly.

"DANTE!" She moaned touching his arm. "Wake up please."

"What?" He said shifting his weight.

"Pain." She moaned. "I think the baby is coming."
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Wed Jul 29, 2009 5:15 pm
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Dante shifted gently trying not to hurt her. He moved and put his hand on her tightening belly. He felt around. He looked up and smiled at her.

"Your not having the baby yet honey, it'll be a couple more hours." He kissed her on the mouth.

Dawn's face twisted in pain. "How would you know?" she growled. "Your not the one having the baby."

"Ten-thousand years of knowing sweetheart. I've known millions of women who went into labor, yours are just little flairs. That's it."

"You sure?" she groaned.

"Positive. And since I think it's going to be a little girl we're naming her Ava Eden."
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Wed Jul 29, 2009 5:21 pm
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"Thats pretty." She said snuggling closer to him as the pains went away. "I'm going back to sleeeeeeeeeppppp." The pains came back though with an uncanny force. She whimpered as she grabbed a handful of sheets. Her site was blurry with the pain. Then they faded.

"Gone?" Dante asked looking down at her.

"Little pains my aaaa" She screamed as they came back. It hurt so bad she couldn't form a sentence in her mind to yell at Dante. This couldn't be right. They were only supposed to be this close whenever she was about to have the baby.



***I say something be wrong. :P Or early birth, I don't know, or Eliza got in the house and is casting a spell or something on her. :P I don't know. :D**
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Wed Jul 29, 2009 5:26 pm
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October Girl says...



**Sure, never too EARLY right? ^__^**

"It's alright sweetheart, it's alright. I'm going to make it all go away." he promised, holding on to her hand. He cast a spell and watched as Dawn closed her eyes. She wouldn't wake until the baby was into the world, which was safe for her.
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Wed Jul 29, 2009 5:32 pm
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****Uh.................what do I post?****
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Wed Jul 29, 2009 5:34 pm
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October Girl says...



**When she wakes up? I dunno I've had a frusterating week and I'm getting really bored of YWS.**
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Wed Jul 29, 2009 5:38 pm
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***NO!!!! You can't stop coming on here. I'm sorry your week has been hard.***

Dawn woke up and looked around. Her eyes landed on Dante who was holding a small bundle. She was still in bed.

"What happened?" She asked.

"Ava decided to come early." He smiled walking over and letting her hold her daughter.

"She is so small." She whispered. "She has your eyes."
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Thu Jul 30, 2009 6:18 pm
October Girl says...



He smiled and shrugged. "They might change. You never know. She's beautiful."

He'd never felt so much love for anyone before. It felt like someone had drop kicked him in the heart a couple of times.
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Thu Jul 30, 2009 8:27 pm
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"What are you thinking?" Dawn asked looking at Dante.

"That I'm the luckiest guy ever." He smiled at her. "I've got two wonderful girls in my life."

"I love you." She smiled.

"I love you too."

****why do only my characters get happy endings?****
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