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Wed Jan 29, 2014 1:44 am
eldEr says...



Actually, no, I'll just review for free (I mean, if you wanted to throw in a photo of soup or curry, I'd be pretty down with that, too). As for the things I will review, and for how I review them!

Short Stories:
With these, I generally look at plot and character, and speak generally of writing style. I don't usually nitpick every spelling error and typo, but I do give tips on flow, voice, redundancy, and the like.

Poetry:
These, I'm only semi-decent at, but I will definitely do my absolute best. Usually, I look at the flow of the poem and the quality of the imagery, as well as originality.

Novels:
I will only review novels if I start from the first chapter/the first scene of the first chapter. I will not review Chapter 10 of your epic fantasy, simply because I don't think it's fair to judge everything based on the middle. Also, if you have one that already has multiple chapters/scenes posted, I'll do anything up to four chapter/scenes long. After that, please don't make a request. However, please do let me know when you post the next chapter by writing on my wall! :D

What I will NOT do:

- as mentioned earlier, the middle chapter or scene of a novel, or novels that have over four chapter posted already.

- pieces that already have six or more thorough reviews. Mostly because there wouldn't be anything to add, and I'd feel like I'm just stealing from the other reviewers.

That's it, that's all, folks. I have no genre preferences, no problems with content, and will review any rating. Thank you kindly, YWSers abroad.
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Wed Jan 29, 2014 2:07 am
Rook says...



Hi!
I will pick you up on this offer.
I have a short story that is the magic number four parts long.
The first chapters has several really good reviews (less than six though ;) ), so if you want to take it rather easy on that one then you can. But the other chapters need a little bit more critiquing than they have.
Thanks in advance!
You Remember- Part 1 of 4
You Remember- Part 2 of 4
You Remember- Part 3 of 4
You Remember- Part 4 of 4
Spoiler! :
I just had "happiness soup"
so you can have it too!
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Instead, he said, Brother! I know your hunger.
To this, the Wolf answered, Lo!

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Wed Jan 29, 2014 2:42 am
eldEr says...



That DOES look like happiness... I will get on it right quick!
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Wed Jan 29, 2014 3:12 pm
horrendous says...



i'd like to send you on a journey to review my new short story:

Eater of Dimensions, Part I
Eater of Dimensions, Part II

i pray for your safe return.
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Fri Jan 31, 2014 6:31 pm
TakeThatYouFiend says...



Sing for joy!

A short poem! :-)
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Sat Feb 01, 2014 1:25 am
crossroads says...



Hai o_o
I think this is the first-ish time I'm posting in this forum, but I'm curious to hear what you think about this thingy.. I did get two great reviews already, but I've edited it a bit since.

Prologue
• previously ChildOfNowhere
- they/them -
literary fantasy with a fairytale flavour
  





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Tue Feb 04, 2014 1:54 am
eldEr says...



Oops. Totally behind on the draw, but those were all done a while ago!
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Sat Feb 08, 2014 11:52 am
Pompadour says...



I'd really appreciate it if you reviewed my novel:

Hawk's eye - Chapter One (Working title)
Hawk's eye - Chapter Two (Working title)
Hawk's eye - Chapter Three (Working title)

Thanks so much!

Spoiler! :
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Have some curry. :3
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Fri Feb 14, 2014 9:42 am
DrFeelGood says...



Need a review for my short story. The link is : The Perfect Thief
  





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Fri Feb 14, 2014 4:16 pm
eldEr says...



All done! @Gaurav009
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Sat Feb 15, 2014 10:11 pm
GoldFlame says...



Would really appreciate reviews on:

Molten Silver: Chpt. 1
Molten Silver: Chpt. 2
Molten Silver: Chpt. 3

Sorry, @ANADIR. Just discovered that we half-share titles :P.
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Sun Feb 16, 2014 2:56 pm
WritingWolf says...



I would love a review on my poem The Cat's Joy.

Keep in mind it is a vilanelle. That means that the first and last line in the first stanza will repeat throughout the poem. If they didn't then it wouldn't be a villanelle.
(So far the only "constructive comment" I've gotten was to not repeat those lines so much. So yeah. I'd like to actually know what you think of my poem, not of the form of poetry I decided to use.)
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Wed Feb 19, 2014 3:29 pm
eldEr says...



done! :) @WritingWolf
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Wed Feb 19, 2014 7:39 pm
horrendous says...



heya, remember when i asked for help on character development? this is the story i was working on.

http://youngwriterssociety.com/work.php ... 92e5fa5dd7

here's some curry. you know what to do.

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it's an extra large.
hor·ren·dous
adjective: shockingly dreadful; horrible
synonyms: appalling, frightful, hideous

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