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Tue Jan 07, 2014 1:55 pm
PenguinAttack says...



Welcome one and all!


Lay down your works and I shall endeavour to read and then devour them, providing ample review at the end of the experience.

My preference lay in poetry but I will attempt all mediums. You may find my knowledge of lyrics and comedic works particularly lacking but I will do my best regardless.

If you do request, please only ONE at a time per member, otherwise my brain may be addled before its time. If you have novel pieces, please specify if you wish me to read the chapters before the chapter you link, if that is necessary.

I look forward to reading your works.
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Wed Jan 08, 2014 12:16 am
parmarskates says...



Hi.
Sorry if this is the wrong way of requesting, but I'm new around here. Apologies in advance.

I'm an 18 year old hobbyist writer majoring in the Philosophy of Law, so my writing may be a tad too logical and linear for fiction. It's my first attempt at it - since childhood I suppose.

Link to designated text requiring review: http://pastebin.com/jpBeRasd

Preference: If you could even skim over it that'd be great. It's sitting at approximately a thousand words so you may or may not want to spend an extensive amount of time on it. I'm aiming for a new twist at the current zombie craze, as I'm "reinventing," through the idea of Philosophical Zombies (D. Chalmers) There's underlying psychological themes, dark humor (expressed through the questionable narration of a seventeen year old sociopath) etcera

Please let me know what you think, and if you could tell me how I could improve my writing that'd be terrific.
  





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Fri Jan 17, 2014 2:25 am
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Fantasticas: The Boy And His Staff

And of course,

Fantasticas: The Boy And His Staff (CHAPTER 2)
“Nobody's perfect. Well, there was this one guy, but we killed him....”
  





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Fri Jan 17, 2014 5:54 pm
TakeThatYouFiend says...



Hello! :-)

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You know that studded leather armour in films? Nobody wore that. I mean, how would metal studs improve leather armour?
  





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Mon Jan 20, 2014 6:11 am
Susurrus says...



Hello! I loved the review you did on my poem and I was wondering if you could take a look at my short story as well?

The Street of Keys

Thanks!
  





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Sun Feb 02, 2014 8:44 am
PiesAreSquared says...



This is so sad....You only have four replies

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The moment you say that one set of moral ideas can be better than another, you are, in fact, measuring them both by a standard, saying that one of them conforms to that standard more nearly than the other. C. S. Lewis

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Wed Feb 19, 2014 1:58 am
Iggy says...



*shifts feet*

You're such a good poet... mind reviewing this for me? - think about it

Go easy on me! (kidding, go hard. make me cry. make me get better at poetry)

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Thu Apr 17, 2014 2:33 pm
joshuapaul says...



Project: Dead Anna (Chapter 1)

Reviews, you say? I will gladly take one.

(Mainly looking for general feedback, not so much nitpicks. Mucho gracias!)
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Tue May 13, 2014 12:18 am
PenguinAttack says...



I forgot this existed but I'll get to these soon! sorry guys!
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