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Mon Aug 12, 2013 11:12 pm
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StoneHeart says...



Wow, I improved that much? Thanks! I'll be sure to get your next review on the way as soon as I can!

*is still working on the clarity.

The reason I got that feeling about Preston is because I used to do critiquing for a bunch of buddies of mine who loved writing crappy vampire/ werewolf romance stories. Not at all my type of reading material, but you were kinda going along with the whole 'mysterious, little bit odd guy turns out to be REALLY weird' formula. Don't change anything though! I like it how it is (I doubt anyone else would get my feeling's duplicated).

Thanks for the feedback!
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I spread my dreams under your feet . . .

. . . tread softly for you tread on my dreams.


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Wed Aug 14, 2013 10:57 pm
Danteke says...



Hey! I've recently started a detective novel and I'm a rookie at this genre. Would love to know your thoughts on it, what you think I should focus improving, what's lacking or overflowing and so on and so forth.

Burned Shirts and Shorter Skirts - Prologue
  





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Sat Aug 17, 2013 10:31 pm
StoneHeart says...



Ha, I'm not great with mystery, but I'll do what I can!

@Danteke
For I who am poor have only my dreams
I spread my dreams under your feet . . .

. . . tread softly for you tread on my dreams.


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Wed Aug 21, 2013 2:08 pm
StoneHeart says...



Done @Danteke Don't forget some feedback!
For I who am poor have only my dreams
I spread my dreams under your feet . . .

. . . tread softly for you tread on my dreams.


We are masters of our silences, and slaves of our words
  





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Wed Sep 11, 2013 9:58 pm
StoneHeart says...



Go figure: I NEED INSPIRATION TO REVIEW.

. . .

So please.

INSPIRE!
For I who am poor have only my dreams
I spread my dreams under your feet . . .

. . . tread softly for you tread on my dreams.


We are masters of our silences, and slaves of our words
  





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Mon Sep 16, 2013 10:18 am
Valkyrie17 says...



Hey there Black! It would be a great help to me if you could review my work. I already have some reviews on it but I need someone to look at my grammar. It needs tidying and I am not that good when it comes to correcting my own grammar.

Erm to inspire you... The beginning makes you think it's a sweet little romance. You have to read it to the end to see why it's not.

Yeah, that's about as inspiring I can get. Sorry! :D

The Land Called Fear

I hope you enjoy reading it as well!
"Always forgive your enemies; nothing annoys them so much" ~ Oscar Wilde

"Love is a serious mental disease" ~ Plato

"I became insane with long intervals of horrible sanity" ~ Edgar Allan Poe
  





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Mon Sep 16, 2013 2:13 pm
StoneHeart says...



Okay, I'll do my best! It won't be a huge review but I guarantee that you will NEVER again write the same.
For I who am poor have only my dreams
I spread my dreams under your feet . . .

. . . tread softly for you tread on my dreams.


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Tue Sep 17, 2013 6:19 am
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EmmVeePi says...



Hey Black,
Would love a review of my childrens/action/adventure/fantasy The Rather Odd Adventures of Daisy: Volume 2 http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=104073 Also if you have the time I would appreciate a review of the first installment The Rather Odd Adventures of Daisy: Volume 1 http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=97126
I would be in your debt. Thank you.
  





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Wed Sep 18, 2013 9:25 pm
StoneHeart says...



I've got a great modification to draw readers in on your story (did I mention you have two reviews coming?): Change the title to The Rather odd adventures of A daisy!

Pause for effect!

(*Expect the reviews by friday*)
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. . . tread softly for you tread on my dreams.


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Sat Sep 21, 2013 12:44 am
wildwildcat says...



Hello I would love a review for Day 1 Part 1 of my novella, A Week for the World!
A Week For the World: Day 1 :Part 1
If you find it interesting, could you also review Day 1 Part 2 and Day 2 Part 1? I hope I'm not overbearing, it's just that I would really appreciate it if you took the time to goo over what I've got.
Thanks so much!
  





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Sat Sep 21, 2013 8:00 pm
StoneHeart says...



Not at all wild, I'd love to review it for you.

Sorry if my review's are a little late right now :( I'm really busy.

BUT I CAN DO IT!!!
For I who am poor have only my dreams
I spread my dreams under your feet . . .

. . . tread softly for you tread on my dreams.


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Sun Sep 22, 2013 3:47 am
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wildwildcat says...



No Problem! @BlackNether12, take your time!
I understand a busy schedule.
  





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Fri Sep 27, 2013 3:59 pm
StoneHeart says...



Sorry guys, but it appears your reviews won't be in till tomorrow :(
For I who am poor have only my dreams
I spread my dreams under your feet . . .

. . . tread softly for you tread on my dreams.


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Fri Oct 04, 2013 5:24 am
smanske15 says...



Hey! Smanske15 here!

It would be really awesome if you could review the beginning of my story, Maverick Odin (link posted below), within the next week. I just need someone to tell me if it is a good story line and if they genuinely like it.

Maverick Odin

If you do end up liking it, please click on the little 'like' star button! :)
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