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Mon Oct 29, 2012 2:35 am
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Shady says...



Need a review? :smt064 Huh? Well, do ya? Do ya?



...guess who just discovered smilie choices. :smt116

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Sun Nov 25, 2012 8:24 pm
Clarity says...



work.php?id=98062
Thanks!
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Sun Dec 02, 2012 2:20 am
Trinity9001 says...



[url]work.php?id=97851[/url]

I edited it and need a review thanks :)
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Sun Dec 23, 2012 3:05 am
methrirr123 says...



Thought I'd do one on this guy. This is a character you may recognise, and his story.

work.php?id=98498

enjoy :smt032

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Sun Dec 23, 2012 8:26 pm
Shady says...



All done! :D

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Mon Dec 24, 2012 12:03 am
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methrirr123 says...



Chapter one! if you ever need a review myself, don't hesitate!

work.php?id=98518

From the ashes a fire shall be woken,
A light from the shadows shall spring;
Renewed shall be blade that was broken,
The crownless again shall be king.
  





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Wed Jan 02, 2013 2:18 am
JohnLocke1 says...



work.php?id=98700

I've had this story posted for a couple of days without any feedback. I would love some!
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Tue Jan 08, 2013 3:55 am
Shady says...



Anyone else?

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Sun Jan 27, 2013 5:18 pm
youssefayman says...



Hello i was wondering if you guys could review my first chapter of my novel. i really need some professional advice, so it would be great if you guys could review it. thank in advance. work.php?id=99215
  





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Sun Jan 27, 2013 8:12 pm
Shady says...



Done. :)

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Wed Feb 06, 2013 7:28 pm
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kazhy419 says...



Mine, please? :D

work.php?id=97070 and work.php?id=99584

Thanks so much!
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Sun Feb 10, 2013 10:40 pm
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DudeMcGuy says...



Greetings Lady Shady!

I have returned to humbly request a review for my infrequently updated story. Here is chapter 8.

part 1: work.php?id=99665

part 2: work.php?id=99666

I hope it's not too hard to read, I wasn't able to format it the way I usually like for some reason. I'm not too sure about this chapter, but I'd love to know what you think about it! Thanks for your help! :)
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Sun Feb 17, 2013 2:02 am
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Questio says...



I have a fantasy piece that is the opening into a setting and set of characters that I hope to expand on with more short stories. It contains girls slaying dragons without being skanky about it, she actually slays the thing without losing all her clothes, as some horrible so-called "artists" like to portray. So please, enjoy and tell me what you think about the story itself (I am not that good with grammar and punctuation and all that jazz, only coming up with ideas).
work.php?id=99851
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Sat Mar 16, 2013 1:04 pm
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elcuidador says...



Here's a challenge for you. Its a poem. Mwhahaha work.php?id=100331
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Sat Mar 16, 2013 5:28 pm
Shady says...



Yay! I finally remembered to update my thread and say that I'm caught up.

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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