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Alfred Symon's Critic Clinic: Bringing Smiles since the 60's



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Tue May 15, 2012 5:25 am
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AlfredSymon says...



Artsy! Done! Next!
Need some feed? Then read some! Take a look at today's Squills at In the News.

The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"
  





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Sun May 20, 2012 9:20 am
emilybrodo says...



Hey Alfred! If you don't mind, could you please review this: work.php?id=94794
Thank you so much XD
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Mon May 21, 2012 2:59 am
alliyah says...



work.php?id=95317

Hey if you have some time I'd love the Point out Review for this poem, I re-wrote it a couple times, and would like someone to review it. And also it's fine if it takes a while too, I'm patient! :) Thanks again!!

~Ally-wa
you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now
but i have promised to return
  





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Sat May 26, 2012 10:50 pm
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zohali93 says...



Hey Al!
Can't beleive you run this place wthout a head. :)
Could you review this for me please?
work.php?id=95542
Do the people think that they will be left to say, "We believe" and they will not be tried? (29:2)
  





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Fri Jun 29, 2012 4:32 am
Shady says...



Hey Alf!

Not sure what type of review I want, so I suppose you can do whatever strikes your fancy when you're writing the review. I'm not real sensitive, so feel free to be brutal if my piece needs it. :)

My request today is on the prologue and first chapter of a novel I'm writing (fantasy).

work.php?id=95999

Thanks!

~Shady

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Tue Jul 03, 2012 9:02 pm
artsy says...



Thank you so much for the amazing review!

I have one more request. :D
The Conjurer Wars: Chapter 2, part one

Thanks in advance!
"You have brains in your head and feet in your shoes - you can steer yourself in any direction you choose!" - Dr. Seuss
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Sat Jul 07, 2012 2:48 am
Nargles says...



Hey would you be able to review this please. It is just a poem I wrote a few days ago! :D
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=96253
Thanks heaps A Kudos Revue would be fine!!
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And don't let a dementor kiss you good night.


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Mon Jul 09, 2012 9:02 am
ShakespeareWallah says...



hey Alf,
i wrote this short story a few days ago and am not quite sure where it stands, so if you have and all all, could you please review it. here's the link.
work.php?id=96269
thanks
Puck
  





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Tue Jul 24, 2012 9:39 pm
Shady says...



Hey Alf!

This is a short piece that's not easily classifiable: work.php?id=96620

I'm not sure what 'type' of review I want. 'Point Out' seems like a good one for this piece, but I'm not scared of the 'Editor' either...so maybe a combination? The 'Editor's Point Out'? :wink:

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Tue Jul 24, 2012 11:18 pm
Carlito says...



Hello!
These lyrics please?
work.php?id=96239

Thanks much!
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Wed Jul 25, 2012 9:50 pm
TheAceofAll says...



Would you mind reviewing the first chapters of my piece Welcome to Orba Nova?
work.php?id=96135
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Wed Aug 08, 2012 7:26 am
ShakespeareWallah says...



Hey Alf!,
would you mind reviewing this: work.php?id=96814
Thanks,
Puck
  





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Thu Aug 09, 2012 3:40 pm
Dradian Far Runes says...



Hello! :)

Id like an editors note for this piece I'm thinking of submitting to a contest. You can be as rough as you want. :)

work.php?id=96845

Thanks in advance!
-The Unknown
They say the eyes
Are windows to the soul
I say the earth
The sky
The moon
The very breath upon my lips
All of these
Are windows
To you
  





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Sun Aug 12, 2012 9:36 am
AlfredSymon says...



The doctor is in! And Artsy's piece is done! NEEEXT! :D
Need some feed? Then read some! Take a look at today's Squills at In the News.

The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"
  





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Tue Aug 14, 2012 7:27 pm
mihaivisan says...



work.php?id=96917
work.php?id=96815

editor's note for both of them, thank you!
"And though I'll think of you I guess
Until the day I die
I think I miss you less and less
As every day goes by"
  








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