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Sun Dec 11, 2011 8:07 pm
Niebla says...



Okay, so this WRFF thread is closed for now. I'm busy with exams and things at the moment, but I'll probably reopen sometime in the summer. ;)

Hey everyone,

I've decided to re-open this WRFF thread to see if anybody wants to request any reviews, especially since I haven't been reviewing as much as I could and I'd love to review a little more. These threads are a great motivation! So I'll get straight to the point.

What I will review:

- Short stories of any kind.
- Novels -- I will do these one or up to five chapters at a time. Please don't ask me to review Chapter 10 or so of a novel unless I have already reviewed the previous chapters.
- Lyrics
- Photography

What I won't review:

- Scripts.
- Articles and essays.
- Art.




About my reviews: I'll gladly give you my overall impression of the piece. I try to be fairly in depth with my reviews - if there's anything which bothers me about a piece, or anything I particularly liked, I won't hesitate to point it out. I try to offer constructive criticism, but I'll never review a piece as being no good without offering solid reasons for it, and providing as many points as I can possibly think of which might help the writer improve it. I also try not to nit-pick too much - I may nit-pick sometimes, but generally only if I notice something which particularly stands out as not quite right or which I recurrently notice. To sum it up, I try to be as in depth as possible and offer an objective view on a piece. If there's anything in particular you want me to concentrate on in a review, just mention it and I'll do my best.

Request away! :)
Last edited by Niebla on Mon Jun 04, 2012 2:25 pm, edited 15 times in total.
  





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Mon Dec 12, 2011 1:44 am
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Jas says...



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I'll give you have a frog now and have after. I have friends who just dissected them so they won't be too hard to find. xD

Umm, the piece is pretty weird and probably should have been posted in Other rather than Other Poetry, but it was too much bother to go and change the category. It's quite long so I might have to give you two or three frogs rather than just one.

Thank you! :D
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

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Sat Feb 04, 2012 10:11 pm
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work.php?id=87706

I have other parts to this story, but I wasn't sure which ones you've read yet, if you have read any. So, I'll just put this here. Thanks. Uh... If you already read this one, I'll find the other for you. Thanks again.
"Always believe in yourself. Do this, and no matter where you are, you will have nothing to fear." - Baron Humbert von Gikkingen
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Thu Feb 09, 2012 6:37 am
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Alpha says...



http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=93270
That's the first chapter of my novelette, The Vanity of The Rose. (Well, it's a novelette only so far.) No one else reviewed it so it'll be great if you did :)
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Thu Feb 16, 2012 11:43 pm
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TheClosetKidnapper says...



Would you mind reviewing the prologue to my novel? I would like some input before I get too far ahead and no one else has reviewed it yet.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=93449

Thank you so much! :D
I'm never what I like
I'm double sided
And I just can't hide
I kind of like it
When I make you cry
'Cause I'm twisted up, twisted up
Inside

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Fri Feb 17, 2012 2:17 am
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Jas says...



work.php?id=93404

^ That's a poem.

work.php?id=93230

^ That's a short story.


I'd like a review on both please! I'd be extremely thankful. :D
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

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Sun Feb 19, 2012 1:03 am
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Gringoamericano says...



work.php?id=93517

This is part of a parody of fantasy novels, called "You've read this before".
"Can't break an omelette without making a few eggs"

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Tue Feb 21, 2012 5:20 pm
Niebla says...



All of those are done! :) Thank you to everyone who has requested a review; keep them coming!
  





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Mon Mar 12, 2012 11:30 pm
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Kafkaescence says...



work.php?id=93914

Your interpretation and such would also be appreciated.
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Tue Mar 13, 2012 6:30 pm
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ENCR says...



Hi,

If you can review my short story that would be great. Let me know what you think the story is about and what connections, if any, you make throughout the story.

work.php?id=93898

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Sun Apr 01, 2012 5:29 pm
Niebla says...



Both of those are done! I'm really, really sorry that it took me so long to get to them - what with lots of things piling up, I completely forgot to check my WRFF thread and so didn't see the requests until a couple of days ago.

However, I have quite a lot of free time on my hands now - and I promise to check this thread regularly - so feel free to keep the requests coming. ;)
Last edited by Niebla on Mon Apr 02, 2012 3:28 pm, edited 1 time in total.
  





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Sun Apr 01, 2012 6:51 pm
AlexWaterfall says...



Could you review chapter one work.php?id=94331 and two work.php?id=94350 of my story please.
  





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Mon Apr 02, 2012 1:04 am
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FallenAngel97 says...



This short story is incomplete for now, but I was wondering if you could read what I have and review it. If it's any good, do you think I should continue it? work.php?id=94369
My heart grows cold
My spirit grows weak
I'm losing my faith
I'm losing my grip...
  





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Wed May 09, 2012 5:02 am
oNegativeZero says...



Hi Niebla, could you review my short story Discord Gear? Thanks.
  





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Fri May 18, 2012 2:44 pm
DeeBee says...



Hey! Could you please review a couple poems of mine? work.php?id=95324 and.. work.php?id=85788

Thank you!
  








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