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Mon Jan 14, 2013 11:37 am
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Blues says...



Finished it yesterday :D

Who's next?

(Also, to do after Senshi's: work.php?id=99064)
Last edited by Blues on Tue Jan 15, 2013 10:31 pm, edited 1 time in total.





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Tue Jan 15, 2013 3:31 am
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VampireSenshi says...



Hai Blues!!!!

when you have the time :3

work.php?id=99043
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NIGHT is always watching...





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Sun Jan 27, 2013 8:47 pm
Blues says...



All done! Who is next?





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Sat Mar 02, 2013 1:41 am
BenGrange says...



Hi! I hope you're still up for giving reviews.

I'm really looking for a critical eyes to tell me what needs to change, what is not fluid, and what I can do better as far as descriptions, imagery, tension, and energy go.

profile/BenGrange/portfolio

Here's my portfolio. I've gotten reviews on the first two chapters, and I've workshopped them with my writing group and my editor as well. The third and fourth chapters, though, haven't had as much attention as the others. Would you mind skimming through the first two (you can review if you want) and get hard on the reviews on the third and fourth chapters? You can do it all if you want, I'm just looking for reviews on the third and fourth.

Thanks!
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Sun Mar 03, 2013 8:57 pm
Blues says...



I'd be glad to! I'll start it in a few days as I have a few deadlines in the coming up :)








It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
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