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Sat Oct 08, 2011 5:39 pm
Audy says...



Would love some feedback on a rather long poem (sorry).

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Fri Oct 21, 2011 12:07 am
Dreamwalker says...



Done!
Suppose for a moment that the heart has two heads, that the heart has been chained and dunked in a glass booth filled with river water. The heart is monologuing about hesitation and fulfillment while behind the red brocade the heart is drowning. - R.S




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Fri Oct 21, 2011 5:17 am
TheEstimableEelz says...



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If you would be so kind.
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Fri Oct 21, 2011 1:37 pm
SparkToFlame says...



HAI Walker!
I posted a new poem, and since all I've gotten is likes, and one review that was a little helpful, I REALLY need a Walker Review. :)

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Mirror Mirror on the wall, who is the fairest of them all?

Probably the second best I've ever written, from my opinion. ;)
Please and thank you! <3
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Tue Feb 21, 2012 2:18 am
Dreamwalker says...



Re-opened ;D
Suppose for a moment that the heart has two heads, that the heart has been chained and dunked in a glass booth filled with river water. The heart is monologuing about hesitation and fulfillment while behind the red brocade the heart is drowning. - R.S




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Sat Feb 25, 2012 5:54 pm
Dreamwalker says...



And still no requests D: I didn't think I got that rusty!
Suppose for a moment that the heart has two heads, that the heart has been chained and dunked in a glass booth filled with river water. The heart is monologuing about hesitation and fulfillment while behind the red brocade the heart is drowning. - R.S




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Sun Feb 26, 2012 12:53 am
Jas says...



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That please!
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

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Sun Feb 26, 2012 10:51 pm
Dreamwalker says...



All done Jasper ;D. Anyone else?
Suppose for a moment that the heart has two heads, that the heart has been chained and dunked in a glass booth filled with river water. The heart is monologuing about hesitation and fulfillment while behind the red brocade the heart is drowning. - R.S




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Mon Feb 27, 2012 1:36 am
Jas says...



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I love your reviews too much. It's a chapter of mahh novel but I'd prefer a review on the actual writing rather than the plot n' stuff. Mostly because I'm not sure if you've read the other chapters and it'd be kind of weird for you to review a plot you don't know.

So yeah, thank you! <3
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~




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Mon Feb 27, 2012 10:57 pm
ENCR says...



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Review my poem please. I'm new to writing poetry, so please comment on the style/format as well as its content. Thanks!




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Sun Mar 04, 2012 1:22 am
xXTheBlackSheepXx says...



Hi Dreamwalker! I remember you gave me some great art reviews a while back. Would you mind doing another one for me? I could really use the critique. Thanks in advance! viewtopic.php?f=27&t=93428
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Thu Mar 15, 2012 5:47 am
jemjive says...



Dramatic poetry review please? It would be lovely. :)
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Your motor's unstable,
Your like an
Undwinding
Cable
Car
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Thu Mar 15, 2012 10:59 pm
zohali93 says...



hi there. could you please review my novel work.php?id=93995
and my poem the link is below
Do the people think that they will be left to say, "We believe" and they will not be tried? (29:2)




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Sat Mar 17, 2012 3:20 pm
Pilot says...



Here's the poem I just wrote:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=94059

Thanks :)
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