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Mon Nov 08, 2010 7:05 am
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Apple's Cassa-de review-ae

Are you looking for a review? Are you sick an tired of waking to realise that your short story/poem/novel/art work hasn't been reviewed? Are you sick of other peoples work being liked and yours left in the dump? That's all about to change with; Apple's Fantastic Review Emporium. You hear right! A new, flashy (alright, revived) emporium has arrived (come back)! A place where all your unwanted things will be reviewed and liked - one hundred percent guarantee - by me; Apple, your friendly reviewer.

Your work will be reviewed in the next twenty-four hours once you've placed down a request.* Not forty-eight hours, not the next week; but straight away! Yes this is one reviewing emporium you can really R-A-V-E too! With a trusted reviewer as myself; you'll have no troubles, none what so ever. *cough*

Rules and Regulations:

-If I do something wrong I.E. Grammatical or spelling wise, please pm me and tell me what I've done because their is nothing more stupid then a reviewer acting smart about something completely wrong.
-What I comment upon or say is not supposed to come in any kind of offence. If it does, PM me in private and we'll discuss; don't paste across my guest book that I'm some beep!
-All works should not be ones that are foul of language, horrifyingly sexual or just past the 18+ mark.
-As I am religious, stories condemning God or any religion is just not worth my attention. I'm sorry, but I will just not review anything on those terms.
-Forgive me for trying to sound smart through the review. :lol:

Explanation of my reviews:

Throughout my review I'll be focussing on two very important parts; your grammar/spelling and the plot/arc of your chapter (or what ever). There will three steps which I'll be going through:

I. Grammar/Spelling

This will be just me going through and nitpicking all the little mistakes you've made.

"I am a boy!" cried the boy.


After the quote I'll go into an indepth analysis of what you've done wrong and the proper way to go through with this. The fixing will be highlighted in red as seen above. (Even though its right, I cannot think clearly, gimme a break).

II. Plot/Arc

Here I'll just be commenting on what I think about your story so far and how I think you could improve it. Ooh and I'll also mention the parts I disliked.

III. Overall

This is just my overall opinion of your work, nothing to big.

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*Review time will only be lengthened if I am unable to reach a computer.
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Mon Nov 08, 2010 7:41 pm
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pinkangel54123 says...



Hi there! I'll be your first client! Yay!
Name of short story/poem/novel/art work: Luna Ch. 1
Genre: Fantasy
Link: Luna Ch. 1
Want a heavenly review?

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Mon Nov 08, 2010 9:19 pm
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Done, pinkangel! Didn't take me that long either, he he. Does anyone else want a review, c'mon keep the lovin- I mean reviews comin'!
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Tue Nov 09, 2010 12:55 am
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SilentRain says...



Hello, Hello!

Ok, so...
Poem
Name- Dark
Link- topic71777.html

Be as harsh as you see fit...

~Rain~
topic68479.html <---- Click here to have your poems reviewed!

Theres always a rainbow after the Rain!!!!!!!




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Apple says...



Just finished, Silent! Does anyone else want a review? Let's go people, gimme somethin' to do this boring rainy day!
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Tue Nov 09, 2010 7:11 pm
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Idraax says...



It's raining? I didn't see any clouds....:( Must not be where I live. Could you do mychapter 7 please?There's a summary at the top. I think the summary's longer than the chapter. :) Thank you!
Check these out please! :)
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Wed Nov 10, 2010 9:20 am
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Apple says...



Finished! And about time, I thought I was never going to get on the computer to do this. Tsk, tsk, friends...But anyway, does anyone else have something needing a review. I'll be happy to look over it. C'mon people, you don't want me to start threatening do you?
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Fri Nov 12, 2010 8:25 pm
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Apple says...



...Anyone? *Tumbleweed rolls across screen*
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Sat Nov 13, 2010 6:11 am
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LaceyDreadth says...



I have come to beg your help. Apparently, you want that. XD

Please be harsh. I promise I'm a big girl and I can take it.

Name of short story/poem/novel/art work: My Addiction's Core
Genre:Poetry

topic71914.html
"A poet is someone who stands outside in the rain hoping to be struck by lightning."
-James Dickey

"It always rains on tents. Rainstorms will travel thousands of miles, against prevailing winds for the opportunity to rain on a tent."
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Wed Nov 17, 2010 7:55 pm
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Apple says...



Done-done-done-dedy-done-done!!! :DDD I actually finished this a long time ago but forgot to mention. Does anyone else want a review? Rollllll up people and do not be afraid. I may bite, but it'll heal again!
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Wed Nov 17, 2010 11:56 pm
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Roal says...



Heyy Apple :]

Name: The Bourreau and the Waltz Dancer
Genre: ... I can't figure it out so... Historical as some would see it?
Link: topic70833.html - Ch. 1
Links to the other 2 chapters will be posted down on ch. 1 :D
14 years have passed
And yet I'm unabled
To find a friend
For my existence is lower
Than a piece of grass.




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Thu Nov 18, 2010 9:42 am
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Apple says...



Fin!!!

Anyone else???? :D You know you want to, posttttt!!!!!!!!!!
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Fri Nov 19, 2010 7:36 pm
Apple says...



....

Anyone?

*crickets chirp*

Alright then. I'm going to cry and then I'm going to cry so much that the whole world floods and until I get a request you're going to be walking around in my tears.

Ready....Set....CRYYYY!!
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Fri Nov 19, 2010 8:28 pm
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Nephthys says...



Don't cry :(

If it will make you feel better, I suppose you can review my script Freya's Replacement.

It is a sci-fi/ fantasy TV script about Norse Mythology.

Thanks :)
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Fri Nov 19, 2010 8:50 pm
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SilentRain says...



Hi!!
I liked your last review, so, you get another request!!

This is another poem
Its name is Letters from Your Shadow

Be as harsh as you see fit!

Thanks

~Rain~
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Theres always a rainbow after the Rain!!!!!!!