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Sat Apr 10, 2010 10:28 pm
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Sins says...



Hidere. My name's Skins and I review stuff.

I mainly review fiction because it's the only thing I really know anything about, so this is mainly a fiction-based reviewing thread. If you really do want me to review any poetry, scripts, art, photography e.t.c. for you though, I'm happy to give it a shot. Just know that the review may not be the most professional one in the world.

If you would like a review, simply post the link as a reply. I will try and get back to you as soon as possible



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Sun Apr 11, 2010 6:21 am
MiaParamore says...



Can you review my story, A Criminal's Heart.
Here's the link:

A Criminal's Heart-Prologue
A Criminal's Heart Chapter-1(OLIVIA)
A Criminal's Heart Chapter-2
A criminal's heart chapter-3
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Sun Apr 11, 2010 1:20 pm
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Done! :D

Can't wait for the next chapter, by the way!

xoxo Skins
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Sun Apr 11, 2010 11:28 pm
Esther Sylvester says...



Hello Skins,


I was wondering if you could review the novel that I am working on? It is a romantic fiction, rated for twelve and up. The chapters aren't that long, (Each about 1000 words or so), and I really need the advice to help me to grow as a writer. Any comments that you could give me are appreciated. You don't have to review the first one because that is the only one that got a lot of reviews! Here are the links, and thank you if you choose to review:


Chapter Four: topic61755.html

Chapter One: viewtopic.php?t=61362

Chapter Two: viewtopic.php?t=61460

Chapter Three: viewtopic.php?t=61553

Thank you very much,

Esther Sylvester
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Mon Apr 12, 2010 4:08 pm
Sins says...



I've managed to review the first three!
I'll definitely get back to the fourth one as well. I've got to go now though, my brother wants the computer :|

EDIT: I've done them all now :D
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Mon Apr 12, 2010 8:28 pm
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Thank you so much Skins! I will work on my novel as soon as I can!
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Mon Apr 12, 2010 11:27 pm
pinkangel54123 says...



Hey Skins,
can you review my story? It's called Luna and it's Fantasy Fiction.
If you wanna read more just tell me, and I'll be sure to post.

Luna 1
Luna 2.1
Luna 2.2
Luna 3

And honestly you don't have to review the first three, but you certainly can.(I would be forever grateful if you did.) Plus I only really need a review on Chapter 3, but it won't make sense if you don't read the rest.

Thanks,
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Tue Apr 13, 2010 4:50 pm
Sins says...



Viola! :)

I'm done with yours Danie!

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Tue Apr 13, 2010 5:01 pm
napalmerski says...



My turn to ask for your opinion skins :mrgreen:
topic61868.html
it's a short novella. Either it will suck you in, or it won't, in both cases I'd be thankfull if you say why...
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Tue Apr 13, 2010 5:48 pm
Sins says...



Hey napalmerski :)

I've never actually done an advanced critique before, but I'm definitely up for it! I'll read your novella and get back to you as soon as possible.
Like I said, I haven't reviewed a novella before, so don't expect an amazing critique! I'll do my best though. :wink:

xxx

Edit: It's done! I did it in one night... I feel so proud :lol:
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Wed Apr 14, 2010 5:21 am
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And a good job it was! Thank you very much, Skins.
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Wed Apr 14, 2010 12:17 pm
Winterblossoms says...



Can I has a review...? Pretty please with a cherry on top...? :3

viewtopic.php?t=61814

It's called Last. Other fiction. :) The first chapter needs some work before I can proceed on posting the second. I hope you like it. :]
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Wed Apr 14, 2010 6:25 pm
Sins says...



Viola!

Yours is done winter :)

Keep them coming guys!
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Thu Apr 15, 2010 4:58 pm
MiaParamore says...



WOULD YOU REVIEW THIS?
Chapter 4

Thanks in advance!
"Next time you point a finger
I might have to bend it back
Or break it, break it off
Next time you point a finger
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Thu Apr 15, 2010 8:12 pm
Sins says...



Yours is done Shubhi.

Hope I was helpful, :wink:

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